"adaptable" - UBC application essay----tell us about yourself

Tell us about who you are.

How would your family, friends, and/or members of your community describe you? If possible, please include something about yourself that you are most proud of and why. (maximum 250 words)

One word that I believe describes myself is adaptable. I moved from my home country Belize to Moscow, Idaho when I was 12 years old to pursue a better education. I left my parents and family and went to live with my elder brother. I was excited at the prospect of moving to another country, and while it was hard at first, I eagerly adapted to and welcomed my new environment.

One of the major challenges I faced was the gap in math knowledge. In Belize, I had never taken any Pre-Algebra or Algebra courses. So when I transferred to my new school in the middle of eight grade, I was quickly overwhelmed by the new, alien information. I am a person who strives to ace every class I take and, therefore, I was extremely frustrated at myself for not being able to keep up with the rest of the class. However, I kept pushing. I requested help at home and sought help from my teacher constantly; I wanted to get better. In the end my hard-work paid off. Despite my original struggles, I proceeded to receive A's in all my following math classes. In spite of my initial shortcomings, I was able to overcome and adapt to the point where I now enjoy the challenges that math brings.

Thanks for helping!

You only responded to the last part of the essay regarding what you are proud of. You failed to explain how your family members (not necessarily parents), friends, and community members would describe you. Therefore, the response statement is only partially correct. You will need to write a new, more responsive essay. You need to respond to this in 3 4 paragraphs. One for a family member, friend, and community member, then one for what you are most proud of and why. If you fail to address all the points in the essay then the reviewer will know that your English comprehension skills are not of a college level at the moment.