ThinhNguyen
Mar 6, 2020
Writing Feedback / [Writing task 2 IELTS] The responsibility of residents and government in protecting the environment [5]
you have done very well providing an appropriate answer to the task; however, there is one thing that concerned me:
"For instance, according to a study, India has seen..."
I think this part is supposed to be with the government's importance, but it was used for the people's. When I read the whole essay, this part troubled me from understanding your first idea. Thus, I think it would be better if you take another example as a subsequent. Thank you.
you have done very well providing an appropriate answer to the task; however, there is one thing that concerned me:
"For instance, according to a study, India has seen..."
I think this part is supposed to be with the government's importance, but it was used for the people's. When I read the whole essay, this part troubled me from understanding your first idea. Thus, I think it would be better if you take another example as a subsequent. Thank you.
