Victoria40156
Apr 21, 2020
Writing Feedback / More and more people now own cars. What are the problem and solution ? [3]
In the first sentece, i think you mean "most." Also, what do you mean by the first sentence of the second paragraph? that sentence sounds fragmented. Also, when you say "This is lound hooter that ..." it sounds informal. I think you should change that, particularly the "pissing people off" part. Overall, I think you should run this through a grammar or spell check to catch the more "wonky" sentences.
In the first sentece, i think you mean "most." Also, what do you mean by the first sentence of the second paragraph? that sentence sounds fragmented. Also, when you say "This is lound hooter that ..." it sounds informal. I think you should change that, particularly the "pissing people off" part. Overall, I think you should run this through a grammar or spell check to catch the more "wonky" sentences.