Posts by Sierra Jang

Sierra Jang

Jun 27, 2020

Research Papers / Restraints in coffee exporting [3]

Is the reference style APA or Harvard or Vancouver?
you should check the correct form of in-text citation.
such as "Cuong, and Toan (2016)," << both two commas, (Paterson and Duxbury, 2007) << and? or &..

Sierra Jang

Jun 27, 2020

Writing Feedback / Sugar-based drink consumption (Ielts task 2) [5]

Your essay is quite nice with various technical terms.
However, there are some errors.

1. You should re-read if it is coherent in particular using signpost, for example, "for example" after "as a result" in BP1.
2. Be careful with unnecessary capital letter.
3. Choose appropriate and academic vocab ("too much" X, "But," no good for the beginning of sentences, "using X more and more soft drink").
4. Avoid repetition (e.g. reason)
5. Don't forget to add hedging words unless you put a relevant evidence (...to maximize profits are two main reasons for using...).
6. Grammar errors in complex long sentences (...When a nation's economy developed, this leads...).
6. Match word limit (250 words +-10%).

Good luck ;)

Sierra Jang

Jun 27, 2020

Writing Feedback / Utilisation of public transport - IELTS Academic Writing TASK 1: Bar + Table [3]

@Holt
Thanks, Holt. It was fabulous feedback for me. I've learn what are the cohesion and coherence from your tips
and i will try to remember your message and write better report. I really appreciate! Thank you so much! ;)

Sierra Jang

Jun 26, 2020

Writing Feedback / Utilisation of public transport - IELTS Academic Writing TASK 1: Bar + Table [3]

Daily public transport trips and population density in 2015

Information is provided by a bar graph which shows the number of utilisation of public transport per person in various cities including London, New York and Tokyo, and a table chart outlines numbers of residents lived in these areas in a square kilometer in 2015.

The main feature of the bar graph is that there is significant difference in using transportation between MRT/Subway/Metro(MSM) and Public Bus(PB). In London, people were more likely used PB Instead of MSM with approximately 0.76 times while MSM were used about half times. People in New York took MSM more frequently than PB that daily trips with MSM were 0.50 as PB was exactly the half. Likewise, in Tokyo, MSM were mostly used as much as almost 1 time whereas PB was chosen less than tenfold compared to MSM. The table chart demonstrates that London and Tokyo contained 5,431 people and 6,168 people respectively, yet, New York provided over 10,000 people which is the highest population among the cities in 2015.

In general, taken PB was more popular for general travel in London while other cities showed MSM was more common in 2015.