zoyatariq
Aug 21, 2020
Writing Feedback / Writing: Causes of water's shortage and how to fix it [3]
@QuocHuu
make your tense clear like in 2nd line u are not using is/am/are it would be is facing, it should be the world is now facing a huge problem of insufficiency of water especially in form of drinking water and other categories.Thus, this essay will elaborates the causative factors of water scarcity and also the different ways to mitigate this problem.
the difference between yours and mine is only the your once is quite simple and with very long sentences use concise words that explain the main purpose of topic as i explained above.
2nd paragraph over using water changed with its over usage or wastage For example, the counties where good water resources are present, instead of saving water for future, wasting this resource on an individual basis.
For the water number would not be used its amount
Thus it is required that government must take some legal action and regulate a law to monitor the water wastage in every home or industry so that people will be aware of the consequences in form of bill or fine.
dripping faucet
its not about what you think and convert it in english word by word please make some sense of the sentence
the latest research i did on water shortage make me believe that leaky faucet is the most prominent contributor in wasting water if t did not turn off properly.
What authority will tell about turning off faucet u can say, that not only a public service message on governmental level but also an individual, must be responsive to that issue.
I think i have did much work on your grammer its too weak try to make sentence by finding new words before adding in text and if cannot then u can google it.
@QuocHuu
make your tense clear like in 2nd line u are not using is/am/are it would be is facing, it should be the world is now facing a huge problem of insufficiency of water especially in form of drinking water and other categories.Thus, this essay will elaborates the causative factors of water scarcity and also the different ways to mitigate this problem.
the difference between yours and mine is only the your once is quite simple and with very long sentences use concise words that explain the main purpose of topic as i explained above.
2nd paragraph over using water changed with its over usage or wastage For example, the counties where good water resources are present, instead of saving water for future, wasting this resource on an individual basis.
For the water number would not be used its amount
Thus it is required that government must take some legal action and regulate a law to monitor the water wastage in every home or industry so that people will be aware of the consequences in form of bill or fine.
dripping faucet
its not about what you think and convert it in english word by word please make some sense of the sentence
the latest research i did on water shortage make me believe that leaky faucet is the most prominent contributor in wasting water if t did not turn off properly.
What authority will tell about turning off faucet u can say, that not only a public service message on governmental level but also an individual, must be responsive to that issue.
I think i have did much work on your grammer its too weak try to make sentence by finding new words before adding in text and if cannot then u can google it.
