Posts by anniehoanganh

anniehoanganh

Aug 30, 2020

Writing Feedback / The three pie charts show information on how three countries deal with waste products [4]

Hi @TriNhan, here are some small mistakes i found in your essay, After reading it please come and check mine to, thank you a lot.

Paragraph 1, line 2: i think the phrase "is widely used" has been repeated twice, so I change it to "while burying waste products underground is commonly applied in the UK and Sweden."

Paragraph 4, line 1: i think the phrase "at (percentage)" has been used several times, so the one is used in the last paragraph I will change it to "occupy 82%" instead of "at 82%".

anniehoanganh

Aug 30, 2020

Writing Feedback / Some people think that in the future lots of changes will occur that will improve our society [4]

Paragraph 2, line 2: human
Paragraph 2, line 2: i think "due to" should be change to "thanks to"
Paragraph 4, line 1: "there are", I think it is a type error, right ?
Paragraph 4, line 2: i think "physical activities of children" should be change to "for children"
Paragraph 4, line 2: "suffer" to "surf"
hope you read this and check my essay too. Thank you a lot. Enjoy @kieumanh007 !

anniehoanganh

Aug 30, 2020

Writing Feedback / This essay will outline the justification of long hours work and why this is a negative trend [2]

In some countries people spend long hours at work

Why does this happen? Is it positive or negative phenomenon?

Working is part of everyone's life nowadays. It is undeniable that citizens from many nations around the world have been working hard and spend many hours on that. The main reason for this situation is the burden of finance. This essay will outline the justification and explain why this is a negative reform.

First of all, finance is the only reason that makes people pursuit of working. The fast development, especially in technology and economics, has resulted in expensive price. In other words, people in this day have to work harder in order to earn more money to pay for many demands of normal lives. For instance, the cost of housing, technology devices, or facilities has become higher than in the past a lot. It is clear why many people have to work harder or spend long hours at work.

This development does not seem to bring a beneficial effect on our lives. Japan is a prime example. News about self suicide due to stress working is popular and easy to be seen in Japan - where employers have to spend almost 18 hours a day for working. The rate of self-killing has never been rising as high as they did. One of the main reason for this unexpected situation is working is so stress and gradually lead people to become a depressive person. If the government does not solve this problem timely, there may be more severe consequences.

To conclude, people who spend a long time at work may occur by the pursuit of living due to the high cost. In my opinion, this statement is a negative reform that may caused a serious effect on our long term life.