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Name: Jonathan
Joined: Sep 14, 2020
Last Post: Sep 25, 2020
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JPM21   
Sep 25, 2020
Undergraduate / GKS-U Personal Statement BIOTECHNOLOGY [2]

South Korea is great for researchers in the field of biotechnology



The reason I want to study abroad, especially in South Korea, because I want to study in a country that provides assistance in the research process for researchers in the field of biotechnology, because in my opinion biotechnology is one of the most useful applied sciences for humans, especially in the field of medicine. medicine and health. If I am asked the reason why I chose South Korea, because in my opinion, first, South Korea is a comfortable country for students, secondly, South Korea has good facilities to support my research while working as a researcher, especially in the field of biotechnology, third, South Korea is one of the countries that has advanced health technology in Asia. I believe that the GKS-U program can help me achieve my goals and dreams for the future, when I graduate from university in South Korea. I want to work for 3 years in a biotechnology company in South Korea to get work experience and knowledge from researchers in South Korea So when I return to Indonesia, my knowledge and experience while working in South Korea as a researcher in the field of biotechnology motivates me to make a new innovation in dealing with health problems that exist in Indonesia.

Family is the greatest motivation I have ever had. The lesson that I got from my parents about how to become a human being that is not only beneficial for myself, but for many people, in my opinion is the most important lesson, because from there I became a person who is sociable and not picky friends. Parents to me are the most precious treasure to me. Education is the most important thing for my parents, it can be seen when they always send me to the best places from elementary to high school. For them, education is something that cannot be negotiated, that's why I want to make them proud by being the recipient of this GKS-U scholarship, because I want to make them proud and be able to reduce the cost of education for me by getting this GKS-U scholarship.

When asked about significant experiences I have had, I will answer the failures in my life. The experience of being rejected many times from various state universities in my country made me feel that my life had no future. However, my father said that everyone has a different future and luck and my father encouraged me to move on, for the future that has been prepared for me. I responded by taking steps to register for GKS-U and Asia Youth International Model United Nations and was successfully selected to participate in the Asia Youth International Model United Nations conference virtually.

Marching band is an activity that I participated in since junior high school until graduating from high school. Although, there were no things or experiences that I got from the extracurricular activities related to the major I chose, but the marching band taught me a lot. Kinship, Teamwork, Responsibility, Discipline, Hard Work, Dare to be different, Dare to try something new, made me believe that what I got in the marching band can make me even more prepared to face various challenges and obstacles in the future. I hope that by getting this GKS-U scholarship, I can get valuable experience to be able to study in South Korea, apply what I got from the marching band, and I can make changes, especially in the health sector in my country, Indonesia. I am confident to say that I am ready to adapt to a new place and prepare for my success to get the best results for South Korea and Indonesia with the GKS-U scholarship.

PLEASE CORRECT MY ESSAY
JPM21   
Sep 19, 2020
Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 - Opinion Essay - Language extinction [4]

@veenajayant
in my experience for IELTS, you must need more spesific and dont use firstly or secondly
Its my opinion, if u fixed ur essay more spesific with the same topic, im sure u can get the best score
Wish U Luck
JPM21   
Sep 14, 2020
Scholarship / "As high as the sky" - KGSP PERSONAL STATEMENT INTERNATIONAL RELATIONS MAJOR [3]

My aspirations to become a diplomat and foreign minister



Everyone must have aspirations and ambitions to be the best in everything. On the journey of becoming the best, everyone wants to be more in everything than anyone else. It's what motivates me to learn even more than other people do. As said Ir. Soekarno "Hang your ideals as high as the sky! Dream as high as the sky. If you fall, you will fall among the stars." that's what I instilled in myself since I was a teenager. The motivational words of the first president and founding father of the Indonesian nation made me dream and aspire to study abroad. Because Ir. Soekarno once said "Whoever wants pearls, must dare to plunge into the deep ocean." These words made me think of getting out of my comfort zone and studying in the best place to be the best. Motivation and support from my parents also added to my enthusiasm and desire to study abroad. Since childhood, I became interested in international news, when I saw news about civil war, Israel's aggression to Palestine, tensions between North and South Korea, and etc. Since then, my heart has been moved to make a difference to the world and aspire to become someone who has a big influence and makes the world safe and peaceful. Becoming a diplomat and foreign minister for Indonesia in the future is my first step towards making the world peaceful and safe. As foreign minister, I want to establish diplomatic relations between Indonesia and Israel that have never been established. In order to persuade Israel to be able to provide independence for Palestine and become a bridge to make diplomatic relations between Arab countries and Israel harmonious, become a mediator for South and North Korea to make peace, make countries experiencing civil war can return to being harmonious country. I want to make Indonesia a country that is known as a mediating state for countries that have disagreements or are in conflict. With the KGSP scholarship program, I believe this will be the first step for me to create a world that is safe, peaceful and serene.

I always give thanks to God because I can be born into a family with an adequate economy, have a father, mother and a younger brother and a younger sister. I grew up in a harmonious family and a family that always prioritizes religious and social values. Even though my family is well off economically, but I was always taught by my parents to work hard and try first to get something I wanted as a reward for my hard work and efforts. Because of that, I grew up as a person who never gave up and always wanted to get an education in the best place. In my family, my father always instilled the principle of being diligent, honest, and fearing God in me as the key to being successful both in work and in living. Because of that principle, I grew to become a person who is diligent, flexible, insightful, knowledgeable, creative, open-minded, and knows how to manage time well. Behind my good personality, I have a perfectionist side, an indifferent attitude, easily become emotional, when I want something using an instant way, and like to underestimate and take it easy when doing something. But honestly, the time when I was in junior high and high school that I spent 6 years and the direction from my parents to take music courses and swim club made me change and learn many things. From there, I began to learn to be a person who knows playing music as a medicine to release stress and how to control emotions within myself, knows how to position myself when I am angry, learns to respect the process and not underestimate things anymore, and reduce the perfectionist side that can harm me. I have not been able to get rid of my nonchalant attitude because for me it is useful to protect myself from unhealthy friendships and an unhealthy environment, because in fact I am a friendly and humorous person when making friends with anyone. The indifferent attitude I have is only as a protector and a shield for me so that I don't enter and mingle into the wrong environment.

My aspirations to become a diplomat and foreign minister of Indonesia cannot be separated from two important figures known to the world, namely Ir.Soekarno and Mr. Ban Ki-Moon as my role models in reaching my dreams. Imitating the unyielding spirit of Ir. Soekarno as my role model made me determined to study abroad, especially in South Korea, because I also idolized the figure of Mr. Ban Ki-Moon who was a role model for me in my career to become a diplomat and a foreign minister in the future. Because of his extraordinary career journey from being a diplomat to finally becoming a general secretary at the United Nations, which in my opinion is the pinnacle of a diplomat's career if he can work in an important position in the United Nations or at least become a delegate representing a country. I want to continue my studies at the place where Mr. Ban Ki-Moon studied, namely Seoul National University with a major in International Relations as my main goal to study. Why South Korea? Because in my opinion South Korea is a country that still shows a strong culture and history that blends perfectly with technology and modernization in the era of globalization. Besides that, it is also one of the goals of students from various countries including Indonesia to get education in South Korea because South Korea is a comfortable and pleasant country to live and study and also South Korea has one of the best education systems in Asia. I hope that with this KGSP scholarship program I can study in South Korea and have the opportunity to meet in person and be able to interview Mr. Ban Ki-Moon, asking some questions about how to become a successful diplomat.

From junior high school to high school, I participated in the marching band extracurricular activities at school. We have achieved various championships in regional marching band competitions and being invited to appear in major events. I got various awards and experiences when I joined the marching band extracurricular. Experience getting a new family in a marching band, how to work in a team, putting aside ego and self-esteem, learning something new, making friends with people who have different personalities and much more. The most valuable experience for me was when I was in grade 2 in high school, I was appointed to be the school's marching band extracurricular coordinator. Being a coordinator, made me have to learn to be a leader for other people in the team, keep the team together and intact, hear opinions and input from team members, decide everything carefully and together with teammates, be responsible to the implementation of these extracurricular activities, and many more, the extracurricular activities have had a lot of impact on my life to respect everyone's opinions more, work together as a team, more respect and understand someone's feelings when they talk to me. That's what makes me like music, especially in the marching band, because it teaches me many things that are useful for life.

I have felt several awards and experiences of appearing at big events when I joined the marching band extracurricular activities, but the award I have never forgotten was when I won 3rd place in the display competition at the regional marching band championship. The journey to get the title was not easy, where we only had 3 months to prepare, learn to unite our minds, put aside each other's egos, learn to be compact, etc. From there, I learned many things that made me aware and changed to learn more to appreciate the process to get the best.

I believe through this Korean Government Scholarship Program it can make me a person of great influence to make the world safe and peaceful. And get to know Korean culture even more and introduce Indonesian culture that is so diverse to friends at universities in South Korea.
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