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mugdho

Oct 28, 2020

Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - WHICH IS BETTER? PROVIDING SCHOOLS & TEACHERS OR COMPUTERS & INTERNET [7]

You can strengthen the paragraphs by giving an appropriate example. For instance, you could write for your second paragraph that a survey reported that 80 percent of students from a certain school performed better in their academics if they were given access to the internet.

mugdho

Oct 28, 2020

Writing Feedback / Criminality in Britain - IELTS - WRITING TASK 1 - LINE PARAGRAPH AND PIE CHART [4]

In the first paragraph , you could write this pie chart and line graph instead of figures. You could also write an additional overview paragraph where you can identify the trends shown in the data instead of reporting values from the graph . This allows the reader to understand what is being spoken of because if you are immediately reporting values , this is not a good start to be honest if you are aiming for band 7 or above.

mugdho

Oct 28, 2020

Undergraduate / Not afraid teen - what you are proud of. UBC Personal Profile Question - Admission Essay [4]

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Thank you for your feedback!

mugdho

Oct 26, 2020

Undergraduate / Not afraid teen - what you are proud of. UBC Personal Profile Question - Admission Essay [4]

Personal Profile essay

I am a 16 year old teenager who is never afraid to fail but someone who is afraid not to try. My parents and friends would describe me as a motivated, passionate and hardworking individual who will leave no stone unturned in order to accomplish the standards I have set for myself. In order to exemplify what I have said in my first sentence, I would like to share my experiences in the Physics Olympiad which is held in our country. It is an annual event in order to select the best candidates to represent their country in the International round of Physics Olympiad. Firstly, I participated in this competition in the years 2018, 2019 and 2020. I had hard luck in my first two tries in this competition. However, I never lost hope and pushed myself to have a better preparation so that I can shine in the competition. It was my failures which galvanized me to work harder and enhance my knowledge of Physics. Finally, in the year 2020, I participated again in the divisional round and I was selected as a divisional winner which allowed me to progress to the national round of the competition. I firmly believe that it was my passion for physics and my attitude towards my initial failures which allowed me to be recognized as one of the top competitors of this competition. Therefore, I am glad to assert that this is an accomplishment which I am proud of.

Could anyone please give me a feedback? Thank you