Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2 - "Comparison of Films production then and now..." [4]

Dear everyone, now I have an essay topic about Film Production:

Films were produced by big companies in the past, but today people are able to make a film.

Do you think this trend is positive or negative?

I have 2 versions of the essay samples, but I choose this one to show you guys. I'll be glad to receive any recommendations from everyone.

"In the past, a film was a series of moving pictures, usually shown in a cinema or on television. The business of making films was responsible for vast companies, but at present, people are able to make films by mobile phones or media devices. In my opinion, I agree this tendency is positive.

Technology innovation is an opportunity for individuals who can create video films following their creation. Today, our online habits are transforming the way we consume video content and film, whether in blockbuster productions or the advertising industry. The disadvantage of film productions in vast companies is related to budget, the money which was purchased to watch a professional film is higher than other films made by individuals. Besides that, a shift from traditional broadcasting such as theaters (always depend on film production companies) to extensive distribution across global networks such as Facebook, website, Netflix, Amazon, and Pact having equivalent production quality standards is also the competitive advantage of personal films.

The critical thing is that movies are made by professional production enterprises would not be affected by other personal film productions. The truth is the most cinematographic products were supported by the large financial and latest technical assistance, this can not occur in the case of individuals. Thus, this film making tendency would not affect huge production companies. In addition to that, a person who has talent is the potential workforce for professional production organizations can exploit and promote.

In conclusion, making video or film content is a beneficial tendency. The assistance of technology and online movie viewing platform was encouraging the development of film production."

Writing Feedback / There is an increasing trend for people to live alone. [7]

There is an increasing trend for people to live alone. What is causing this to happen?

Will it have a negative or a positive impact on society?

The extraordinary rise of living alone is among the most significant social trends of the modern world. Living alone is ubiquitous in developed, open societies, and this particularly affects health and health care. In my opinion, experiencing one has an adverse impact on society.

One possibility is that there is a causal link between living alone, being socially isolated, and feeling lonely. But these are three distinct conditions, and living alone does not necessarily mean experiencing one or both of the others (being isolated or feeling lonely). Overall, the main cause of living alone is the tendency of life, nowadays, people do not get married any more than previously. Secondly, individuals frequently spend more time studying and working, especially in civic. Research shows that Americans who are working as journalists, scholars, health care providers, and business persons usually conflate living alone, feeling lonely, and being isolated, and the result is widespread confusion about each condition.

In more detail, living alone is the consequence of isolation because of physical frailty as well as for deaths in their family and friendship networks. Thus, they have smaller social networks and less stable contact with children, and they face heightened risks of isolation if they divorce or become widowers.

The risks of social isolation depend not only on which kind of people, but also on the place people are living. Poor neighborhoods with a robust social infrastructure, busy sidewalks, and these social infrastructures suffered higher mortality rates.

At these points, most policy recommendations for reducing living alone are essential. As the population ages and the number of people aging alone grows, societies throughout the world will need to develop new supportive housing programs and new forms of elderly care.