Letters / Letter of Intent for undergrad Turkey Burslari scholarship application - Computer science degree [3]

Good day all! I intend to use this sample which I used for the Turkey scholarship application to base my future letter of intent on. Kindly make some suggestions as to how I can make this more effective. Any and all criticism, no matter how harsh, is highly valued and your time is greatly appreciated. Prompts are as follows,

explain the following details: your academic and social experiences relating to the field you want to take an education in, your reasons for choosing Turkey for study, and the importance of your future plans for your education and scholarship in Turkey. You can write the letter of intent in the language you can express yourself.

My essay:

letter of intent

Coming to Pakistan after living abroad, I was deeply moved by the suffering among its citizens due to low average agricultural yields leading to food shortages. Pakistan ranks 88th among 107 countries in the Global Hunger Index 2020 and 26 million people remain underfed. I believe salvation lies in AI, which can help untrained farmers plan better by using weather forecasts, analyzing soil and crop health, and taking all data into account to suggest optimum water and fertilizer usage, and timely harvesting at faster rates than humans. Implementing this would require the expertise of AI specialists, which spiked my interest in this field.

I have expertise in analytical and logical thinking which have aided me in maintaining A grades in mathematics and currently, I am studying under a merit-based scholarship. My Pre-Engineering coursework provided me an in-depth knowledge of advanced mathematics which motivated me further to pursue this degree. Professionally, I developed the skill to Photoshop and build websites which I used to freelance online. During my participation in a science exhibition at the ISW 2019, I took part in preparing machine learning algorithms. This inspired me to learn programming in python from free online courses.

After completing my 4 years degree, I plan to pursue further specialization in AI so I can apply what I learned in Pakistan and contribute to the development of agriculture which can increase food security. I am a goal-oriented person and also have shifted countries and perfectly managed to adapt to my environment, learning to be a team player in doing so. My long-term goal is to introduce AI in Pakistan's agriculture and aid its development. I aspire to make it efficient and economical, by using AI that can plant crops, fertilize seeds, detect diseases at faster rates. On a wide scale, this can solve the food crisis of Pakistan. Thus, I must receive my education from prestigious Turkish universities, allowing me to develop collaborations between the two nations.

I am attracted to Turkey due to its high standards of education and ranking of universities among the top 500 in the world. Traditional methods of teaching in Pakistan impose hurdles in the development of AI as courses are irrelevant to the demands of the market. These institutions lack the quality of teaching and have an outdated curriculum. Turkey, on the other hand, has been increasingly investing in education and automation, spending 113.6 billion liras in 2014. Other factors include the initiatives carried out towards publications in AI, ranking Turkey 16th in the world in addition to AKINROBOTICS being the first robot factory in the world. These characteristics reflect on the quality of education as evident from alumni's reviews, thus I strongly aspire to secure admission in Turkey and I am confident that I will be able to match with the high standards of its institutions.