Undergraduate / Why engineering at Ryerson admission essay; 'fascinated with mathematics' [9]

This is my essay for admission to ryerson, can someone please check it and edit it. Please and thank you!

Ever since I was a child, I was fascinated with the worlds of mathematics and science and their applications in the real world. My father, a mechanical engineer, was one of the people who inspired me to continue in the two fields while taking me along with him in order to experience the world of engineering first hand. With that in hand, I dedicated my senior years into studying the sciences and mathematics with a future goal of applying to engineering at university; however I had gained a new passion in genetics and biomaterials as I sought to minor in biology.

My biology teacher organized a trip to the University of Toronto to listen to various lecturers about their work in the field. One of the lecturers was a biomedical engineer who worked under a contracting agency that develops medical devices and prosthetics for doctors at hospitals. He spoke of his work, the hardships he had to overcome in university in terms of school work but most of all his enjoyment and passion towards what he does. I knew of the difficulty of engineering programs but this combination of biology with engineering ignited my passion to new levels as I had discovered the perfect link between the two and I would strive to accomplish my goal no matter how difficult it might be just like the biomedical engineering lecturer.

I had concluded that my future was at Ryerson for their biomedical engineering program, upon learning that it was the first ever stand alone biomedical engineering program in Canada. Yet I had to reject my offer due to sudden family problems that eventually led to financial issues and me taking a year off to recuperate. After a time of hardship, things slowly returned to normal and I have taken advantage of this gap year by volunteering at Rouge Valley hospital, as a technician aid at Mondeo Mechanic and working as a surgical assistant at Yorkville Eye center. My time at Rouge Valley and Yorkville has given me great insight and experience into the medical field, while volunteering at Mondeo Mechanic has infused me with engineering experience as I have learned various aspects from installations of materials to understanding and developing AutoCAD drawings. Such experiences have matured me and shown me the possibility of using such skills to design equipment that will help patients and improve our healthcare system.

Ryerson is the best place for me to accomplish my passionate goal of becoming a biomedical engineer. The integration of biology, medicine and health into an engineer field will give me the skills to benefit in both engineering and the life sciences. With Ryerson's first ever stand-alone biomedical engineering program, I hope to gain the knowledge and skills I need to enhance the well-being of many lives, to invent prosthetics that will aid those without limbs and create and indulge myself into researching new technology that will improve our health care system for years to come.