winxangle
Jun 4, 2021
Writing Feedback / Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers [3]
should be "on the one hand"
should be "on the one hand"
winxangle
Jun 4, 2021
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 1 - Percentages of people living in the towns and cities in 4 different countries [5]
Should be" Between 1990 and 2010"
Should be" Between 1990 and 2010"
winxangle
May 28, 2021
Writing Feedback / Writing task 2: People say that a country will benefit greatly if its students study abroad. [3]
Writing task 2:
People say that a country will benefit greatly if its students study abroad.
It can be argued that it is beneficial for a nation to let its students go oversea to pursue education from international environment. As far as I am concerned, I partly agree with this statement. Although the positivity can be observed through the international updated knowledege, a country may lose its best students.
On the one hand, when students study abroad, the new knowledge they absorb would benefit their own country. In fact, many developed nations such as USA, the UK have preceded with the major technological breakthoughs. Thus, if they learn the knowledge of these countries, they will adapt it and make the innovations. As a result, these innovations would change their country and give it an edge over other nations.
On the one hand, the phenomenon called brain drain could occur amoung every countries. To be specific, the large number of students who initially go internationally for educational purposes may decide to settle as a resident because of progressive living condition of other regions. Ultimately, the students' intellectual property might be no longer possessed by their home country. Consequently, the brain drain problem would have a big impact on their country's workforce.
In conclusion, despite the development of studying abroad is positive, I only partly agree with this. While a country would greatly gain the rich stream of knowledge, there is a chance to brain drain happening and inflicting its human resources. After thorough analysis this subject, it is believed that government should seek the viable solutions to curb this problem.
Writing task 2:
People say that a country will benefit greatly if its students study abroad.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It can be argued that it is beneficial for a nation to let its students go oversea to pursue education from international environment. As far as I am concerned, I partly agree with this statement. Although the positivity can be observed through the international updated knowledege, a country may lose its best students.
On the one hand, when students study abroad, the new knowledge they absorb would benefit their own country. In fact, many developed nations such as USA, the UK have preceded with the major technological breakthoughs. Thus, if they learn the knowledge of these countries, they will adapt it and make the innovations. As a result, these innovations would change their country and give it an edge over other nations.
On the one hand, the phenomenon called brain drain could occur amoung every countries. To be specific, the large number of students who initially go internationally for educational purposes may decide to settle as a resident because of progressive living condition of other regions. Ultimately, the students' intellectual property might be no longer possessed by their home country. Consequently, the brain drain problem would have a big impact on their country's workforce.
In conclusion, despite the development of studying abroad is positive, I only partly agree with this. While a country would greatly gain the rich stream of knowledge, there is a chance to brain drain happening and inflicting its human resources. After thorough analysis this subject, it is believed that government should seek the viable solutions to curb this problem.
