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The negative impacts on people' health if they do less physical activity than use electronic devices [3]
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spelling suggestionserror : short-sightedness --
suggestion : shortsightedness
Long-sightedness --
suggestion: longsightedness
+ One sign of an excellent writer is the use of transitional phrases (e.g. therefore, consequently, furthermore).
The following transitional phrases were found in your document:
and, in the past, especially, instead, for instance, therefore, for this reason, although, in conclusion, moreover, on the other hand, consequently
-Consider using additional transitions where appropriate:
· nevertheless
· notwithstanding
· accordingly
· conversely
· ordinarily
-These words and phrases fall under a few grammatical categories:
· Conjunctions: but, provided, and, although
· Prepositional phrases: in addition to, in conclusion
· Adverbs: also, however, nevertheless