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Name: Phương Thảo
Joined: Oct 3, 2021
Last Post: Dec 4, 2022
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From: Viet Nam
School: Thuy Phuong Secondary School

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phuongthao0608   
Oct 9, 2021
Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - ENVIRONMENT PROBLEMS: THE LOSS OF ANIMALS AND PLANTS OR OTHER ISSUES? [11]

In my opinion, your writing is so good and I can learn something from you. I admire how you use different kinds of structure and vocabulary.

However, you should give more information about the loss of plants and animals. You just told us why this happened and generally the loss, but it hasn't have supporting yet so it isn't strong enough.
phuongthao0608   
Oct 5, 2021
Writing Feedback / Air pollution - protect the environment - write about air pollution and how to deal with it. [3]

AIR POLLUTION

- protect the environment - write about air pollution and how to deal with it.

Air pollution is a serious problem, and it also is a common essay topic. I wrote about it and hope you'll help me with my essay. THANK YOU!

This is my work:
In the recent years, we have to face up to a serious problem: air pollution, which is predicted out of control in the future. It directly affects our lives. Air pollution occurs when the atmosphere contains gases, dust or fumes in harmful amount.

The pollution isn't natural, how it appeared? There are some causes. First, factories dump untreated heat, smog and sewage, waste into environment. Second, vehicles make exhaust and dust. Third, consumer and commercial products make landfills from its waste. Fourth, people burn trash and fossil fuel, it produces carbon dioxide. Finally, in agriculture, chemical substances (pesticide and herbicide), fire smoke and pollen can also be pollutants.

We are living in a big air tank. If the air is polluted, of course people are affected. Air pollution harm our respiratory systems, it leads to pneumonia, bronchitis, lung cancer or even the death. It changes the ecosystem, kills animals and botanical species. Air pollution contaminates water and soil, cause global warming and natural disaster.

We call for some solutions. Factories and transport must have exhaust treatment system. If people use electric public transport, cycle or walk, there'll be less poisonous fume. We ought to use environmentally-friendly products and renewable fuel, follow the 3Rs (reduce, reuse, recycle) and put out all the fire. We shouldn't use fireplace or wood stove for heating and cooking. And the most important action is plant more trees - our nature lungs.

Protect the environment is our crucial responsibility. It needs our hands. If each one of us, the small parts prevent air pollution from happening together, there'll be huge effects.
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