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Name: Ina Ahmed
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Daegu   
Dec 31, 2021
Undergraduate / Extracurriculars and intense studies - Stanford Prompt (about something that is meaningful) [2]

Tell us about something that is meaningful to you and why



"Ma, if I became like Albert Einstein, would you be proud of me?" My ten-year-old self asked. From my parents' seemingly strict expectations of good grades and extracurriculars, I thought I would hear a simple yes from my mom, but instead, I heard the complete opposite:

"Einstein might have been a genius, but a peaceful home life was something he never seemed to achieve. If it means that you have an unhappy family in the future, then no: I don't want you to be Einstein."

In high school, I immersed myself in various extracurriculars and intense studies. I won't lie, succeeding was joyful to relish in, but it was lonely. I often skipped family dinners and car drives, constantly hopping onto the next assignment. It wasn't sustainable, and I realized that academics couldn't be my only life. Yes, maybe I could have spent the extra hour perfecting my English essay, but instead, I decided to support my little sister at her volleyball game (I didn't realize how good she was!). Maybe I could've spent lunch break refining resolutions for my international Model UN conference, but then I would've missed out on the amazing friends I made worldwide. At Stanford, I will undoubtedly strive to prosper in my classes and contribute to the campus culture through my interdisciplinary interests. But like my mom said: it will only be done by me being my name, the girl who now remembers to cherish her familial and friendship joys.
Daegu   
Dec 31, 2021
Writing Feedback / New company goods - Ielts writing for task2 [7]

It is a bit a vague, and you want to get rid of the fluff. "However, it also has some bad effect in some cases" can be replaced with "However, due to the naturality, human beings are born to have a sense of curios..." This makes it much more conscise. As someone else said; the word count has to be 250 words
Daegu   
Dec 31, 2021
Undergraduate / Common App Essay on Bullying [4]

I agree, remember you don't want to make the essay overwhelmingly negative. Cut the bullying to one paragraph and then continue on writing about how you overcame it. Also, a stronger introduction will keep the admissions interested. Did you tend to imagine a life outside of the one you had? Maybe be like "I ran past the castle into the gates of serenity to escape the mighty dragons that chased for oh so how long." Then compare how you actually went to the bathroom to escape your tormentors? Just an idea!
Daegu   
Dec 15, 2021
Undergraduate / WHAT IS IMPORTANT TO YOU? WHY? (UBC but can be used in other university/scholarship applications) [2]

WHAT IS IMPORTANT TO YOU? WHY?



"The only source of knowledge is experience." This quote from Albert Einstein sums up my philosophy of learning as a student, which has been so important to me as it has shaped my confidence as a knower. COVID-19 virtual school wasn't stimulating my mind like in real life, and it made me realize I had to continue my education beyond the four walls of school. Education could no longer be defined as homework sheets and tests for me; but rather the drive for learning from my initiative. I pursued higher academic interests not taught at my school, such as computer science and took a neuroscience internship at the University of Toronto.

Despite the apprehension of my initial limited knowledge, I continued building my repertoire of experiences, which helped expand my insight. It was not always the academic material from which I obtained the most knowledge, but rather the courage I gained for asking questions and seeking answers to complex queries. I remember after my first year, I took over the robotics club after all members of the club graduated. I felt extremely unprepared to lead the club with my experience but I wanted to take it as an opportunity to learn. Eventually, we got into the top ten teams of our tournament- completely unheard of for our rural school. Before, I feared failure from seeking new knowledge. However, I realized that while it seems peculiar to be proud of "failure," it enabled me to take risks, embrace all results, and live a life unfettered from doubts.
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