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Posts by Jenny3110 [Suspended]
Name: Lê Thụy Bảo Khanh
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Last Post: May 27, 2022
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Jenny3110   
May 27, 2022
Writing Feedback / Does punishment is necessary for children? [3]

Although you have written that you will outline the appropriate penalty at the introduction, I hardly see it on the essay.
Jenny3110   
May 27, 2022
Writing Feedback / Ielts writing test 1 - map of a museum topic [5]

You should divide your essay into different parts and your work is missing the introduction. I also see that you have make a mistake on the word "rooms". I believe your purpose is that it is synonym with "place". However, I checked on the dictionary and it said it is an uncountable noun. Therefore, it could make readers misunderstand your intention
Jenny3110   
May 24, 2022
Writing Feedback / There is a school of thought believe that the entry of museums should be free for everyone [2]

Many museums charge for admission while others are free



Human beings have been through so many crucial events both in art, politics,..., therefore, to remind and treasure what had happened in the past, museums were established all over the world. There is a school of thought believe that the entry of museums should be free for everyone, while their opponents think that the fee of ticket is resonable. In my opinion, I believe the advantage of this entry fee far outweighs its disadvantage because many museums wouldn't be able to protect their ancestral possessions without it.

People who on the side of free entry into museums have their own arguments since not everyone is wealthy enough to afford the fee. For example, people have to pay 17 euros to get access to Louvre Museum, some visitors would it is would rather affordable to see to "mysterious smile" of Mona Lisa, however, it would be an economic burden for the poor, or travellers for under developing countries, those hardly pay for the cost of accommodations and food. As I already mentioned, museums are the place for people to learn new things, charging for entry could be a barrier for people to achieve new knowledge and could potentially raises a inequality among people.

Despite the aforementioned disadvantages, I am still on the side that museums should be allowed to charge people when entering. The chief rationale could be the bills for other expenses. Since the displacement in museums have been collected after a long time being scattered around the world, the majority of them were not in a good conditions, consequently, the cost for reserving and storing each year is enormous. The electricity, water bills, and other costs for security and management, additionally, are noteworthy. The sales of tickets could somehow diminish the heavy burden of finance on every museums' shoulders, and could lead to better services which would satisfy customers.

Moreover, to solve the problem given by the former, thanks to the development of technologies, museums are now able to hold online exhibitions which include spectacular pieces of art and clear descriptions of each masterpieces.

In conclusion, although I recognize that the museums ticket sales can cause drawbacks to stakeholders in societies, I believe that museums should not remain free for all so as to be operated and developed most effectively.
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