mt30
Sep 15, 2022
Scholarship / Accounting - Statement of purpose for POSCO Scholarship [4]
I am not a teacher, it is just my humble comment depending on my experience, so don't be so believing in it. Your essay is almost excellent. At first, the range of your vocabulary is quite diverse and i like how you select and use them. the content of essay is fascinating, the structure clear make it not too hard to understand the whole story. the last thing, i think you have some grammatical mistakes. in some sentences, you still use simple tense. It is all my opinion.
Have a great day.
I am not a teacher, it is just my humble comment depending on my experience, so don't be so believing in it. Your essay is almost excellent. At first, the range of your vocabulary is quite diverse and i like how you select and use them. the content of essay is fascinating, the structure clear make it not too hard to understand the whole story. the last thing, i think you have some grammatical mistakes. in some sentences, you still use simple tense. It is all my opinion.
Have a great day.