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myieltsw2sucks

May 7, 2023

Writing Feedback / [WRTING TASK 2] Some people think it is more beneficial to take part in team sports than solo sport [3]

+ Opinions differ on ... I am of the opinion ... -> Ever since the emergence of sports, there have been arguments on whether playing in teams or individually is more beneficial. Personally, I am of the opinion that they each have their own set of merits.

+ individuals -> people
+ On the other hand, individual sports can (...) pressure when performing. In contrast to team sports, people participating in solo (...) to rely on. Therefore, individuals would need to develop a pertinacious mentality to be able to (...) may face, instilling in them courage and perseverance.

+ Concerning the latter -> Additionally
+ also donnot have -> are also not under the obligation

some of these are only suggestions and are not obligatory, but I just think they would sound more formal

myieltsw2sucks

Apr 30, 2023

Writing Feedback / today is a beautiful day and i want to eat sushi [2]

WRITE AN ESSAY OF ABOUT 250 WORDS DISCUSSING THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF LIVING IN A MODERN WORLD

In the era of booming technological developments and many other contemporary trends, it is undeniable that the world today is becoming more convenient and globalized; nonetheless, there are certain drawbacks and liabilities that such modernity may bring. This essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in the modern world.

First and foremost, advanced technology spearheads humanity toward a future-proof life. With the advent of new machinery, countless previoulsy burdensome and exasperating tasks can now be effortlessly done. Namely, accommodation, which before the introduction of the modern public transportation system was very problematic. Health care is also ameliorated by implementing cutting-edge medical equipment, granting immediate access to medical records, and dramatically heightening surgical accuracy. Thus, saving millions of lives.

On the other hand, in aid of today's massive demand for commercial goods, more powerhouses and factories have to be built in order to produce products quickly. Due to such an increase in construction, large amounts of waste gases and garbage are disposed into the environment, causing various pollutions such as air and water pollution, hence lowering living standards globally. Additionally, the pursuit of financial success in many countries pushes people to strive and work harder. This creates a competitive society and makes life more stressful, inherently reducing the happiness level.

In conclusion, along with the merits that advanced technology brings such as better healthcare and transportation system, our hectic world today is the cause of earth's deteriorating environment, and it also increases our stress level, making us less happy.