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Posts by Helen335
Name: NGUYỄN THU ÁNH
Joined: Oct 1, 2024
Last Post: Oct 13, 2024
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Helen335   
Oct 13, 2024
Writing Feedback / Task2: Nowadays, people store knowledge on the internet instead of in books. [2]

prompt: In the past, people stored knowledge in books. Nowadays, people store knowledge on the internet. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

It is no doubt true that modern individuals prefer to keep knowledge online than in books. From my perspective, this trend is more advantageous for social development because it opens up many more opportunities to access knowledge worldwide.

It is understandable that some people think saving knowledge on the internet is detrimental. One clear disadvantage is that it can be difficult for older people. This is because they struggle with new technological devices and search for information hard. As a result, older individuals have limited ability to update their knowledge. Besides, the decline in the number of book users has caused the revenue of libraries and publishers to decrease dramatically. Another downside of storing knowledge online is that the value of books is fading among the younger generation.

However, I firmly believe that the advantages are more significant. One clear benefit is that it can be flexible and convenient for people. Nowadays, individuals can easily access knowledge from around the world at any time and from anywhere, which helps them broaden their perspectives on many aspects of life. This is especially important for students when they can learn everything through smart devices right at home. For example, children can access numerous English lessons early on, as well as knowledge in various fields through instant videos, journals, and virtual courses available on official websites and online centers. Similarly, individuals working from home such as women or those living in remote areas have the opportunity to update their knowledge that does not require to move around. This change contributes to a more well-rounded development for people.

In conclusion, storing knowledge online is cutting-edge and more advantageous for future generations due to its availability across multiple platforms and accessibility to a wide range of people.
Helen335   
Oct 8, 2024
Writing Feedback / Task 2: Nations should spend more money on skills and vocational training for practical work [2]

Promt: Nations should spend more money on skills and vocational training for practical work, rather than on university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some individuals hold the view that allocating significant government funds to skills and professional training for practical work is better than allocating them to higher educational institutions. From my perspective, I fully support this viewpoint for several reasons and offer my own opinion in the following essay.
I endorse the idea that spending more money on skills and vocational training courses for practical work is superior to a university education. It is due to the focus on developing a vocational workforce that plays an important role in the nation's growth, resulting in the generation of significant wealth. Therefore, this workforce is a crucial human resource for growing the nation's economy and society. In contrast, being excessively knowledgeable workforce leadS to the loss of labor positions and more and more people would like to respond to higher positions such as leader, manager, or executive. This means the production would be delegated and rare. For instance, the number of Vietnamese graduates has dramatically increased in recent years, leading to harsher competition in the labor market and the rising rate of unemployment.
Furthermore, investing in vocational schools helps graduates apply knowledge in practical work rapidly and effectively, thanking for comprehensive professional training programs. Besides, they are prepared with sufficient soft skills such as presentation, time management, and organization to address work tasks and are easily accepted in a position. For instance, over 80% of German students pursued vocational studying courses after graduating high school because it brings a stable salary level instantly. Meanwhile, studying at university requires hard work and patience over a long-term period, so students need to spend a lot of time and money. To give an example, completing a higher education program in Vietnam typically takes four to six years, while completing a vocational course usually takes about three years.
In conclusion, countries should allocate more money for skills and vocational training for practical work because that brings more benefits for the growth of the economy and society.
Helen335   
Oct 8, 2024
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing task 2:People becoming interested in the history of the house or building they live in [5]

In the sentence 'First is to satisfy their own curiosity about past story of the place,' consider rephrasing it to 'First, it is to satisfy their own curiosity about the past history of the place.' This will improve clarity and grammatical accuracy. Additionally, in the conclusion, you might want to emphasize how understanding a property's history can enhance one's connection to their home.
Helen335   
Oct 8, 2024
Writing Feedback / Some think newspapers are the best method for reading the news [4]

In the sentence 'In conclusion, while there are mixed opinions on determining whether using newspapers or other media for exposing to news is more effective,' consider rephrasing to 'whether using newspapers or other media to access news is more effective.' This change improves clarity and flow. Additionally, in the phrase 'this means is characterized as out-of-date,' it would be clearer to say 'this medium is considered outdated.
Helen335   
Oct 8, 2024
Writing Feedback / Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment [3]

In the sentence 'However, humans can take measures to address these problems,' consider specifying what types of measures could be taken. For example, you might mention community clean-up initiatives or educational programs to raise awareness about environmental issues. Adding specific examples can strengthen your argument and provide more clarity.
Helen335   
Oct 8, 2024
Writing Feedback / The Death Penalty is the best way to control and reduce serious crime. To what extent do you agree? [5]

In the sentence 'To begin, it's undeniable that the death is penalty is partly useful for reducing dangerous crimes,' there is a grammatical error. It should be 'the death penalty' instead of 'the death is penalty.' Additionally, consider rephrasing 'it's helped lower the country's crime rate than other countries' to 'it has helped lower the country's crime rate compared to other countries' for clarity.
Helen335   
Oct 8, 2024
Writing Feedback / Task 2: Climate change has a negative impact, while others think it providdes more opportunities [2]

promt: Some people think climate change has a negative impact on business, while others think that it provides more business opportunities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, people are facing new environmental challenges. Some individuals hold the view that climate change causes detrimental effects on enterprises. However, others opine that it will open new business occasions. While both viewpoints are valid, I lean towards the former.
It is understandable why some people think companies can encounter more business opportunities when climate change still occurs. Firstly, although climate change causes biodiversity loss, in which many species become rare and even extinction, this leads businesses to boost the development and innovation of products by sustainable alternative sources or search methods to maintain products longer and sufferable extreme conditions. Secondly, these green products based on effective marketing campaigns attract a large quantity of consumption, generating huge revenues. This not only brings more benefits for business but also helps to communicate the meaning of environmental preservation to everyone.
However, I firmly believe that climate change severely impacts enterprises because of consequences, namely heat waves, cyclones, or disasters such as floods, droughts, and typhoons. As a result, companies can not operate and make profits. Sequentially, goods are not transported, causing a significant increase in the amount of stocks. It freezes the companies' budgets and limits storage capacity. Moreover, climate change also damages crops and decreases the quantity and quality of food production, affecting business and human livelihoods seriously. For instance, Vietnam has just experienced the largest disaster in 70 years. Floods make a huge number of plants under water and can not be harvested. Not only companies are damaged, but also food resources for humans are threatened.
In conclusion, although both sides of view are reasonable, I still opine that climate change causes more drawbacks for organizations than benefits, because of its damage to finance and human resources.
Helen335   
Oct 8, 2024
Writing Feedback / In order to study at university, students is required to pay expensive tuition fees. [3]

In the sentence 'However, some individuals think that the abolition of tuition fees play an important role to make all children receive the education at university,' there is a grammatical error. It should be 'the abolition of tuition fees plays an important role in ensuring that all children receive an education at university.' This correction improves both clarity and grammatical accuracy.
Helen335   
Oct 8, 2024
Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK 1 - PROCESS - How drinking water is made using solar power. [4]

In the sentence 'The process continues with the stage when the converted energy is used to generate a pump in an underground well,' it would be clearer to say 'to power a pump' instead of 'generate a pump.' This change makes it easier to understand the function of the energy.
Helen335   
Oct 8, 2024
Writing Feedback / Task 2: In many countries, mainly tourists, but not local people, visit museums and historical sites [2]

Promt: In many countries, mainly tourists, but not local people, visit museums and historical sites. Why does this happen, and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places? (Cause and Solution)

There has been a worthing concern in many countries that most visitors from other areas experience local museums and historical places. At the same time, locals are less appealing to these sites. This essay will delve into discussing some reasons why this has occurred as well as ways to combat it.
A range of factors are responsible for the decline of local visitors to museums and heritage sites. Considering the subjective cause, local people growing up there are familiar with everything around them. Therefore, museums and historical sites do not attract them much and they usually visit other cultural places by themselves. Considering the objective cause, the authorities organize a few activities such as introducing and encouraging to visit these historical sites for local populations. This results in decreasing the number of guests at these sites and reducing the popularity of local history and cultures with locals.
To attract more local people to visit these places, several multi-faceted solutions should be implemented. The first way is that the museums and historical places in local areas should organize marketing campaigns on many aspects such as social media, newspapers, and banners. Secondly, the government should allocate funds to support the decline of entrance fees for local tourists. Another solution is that schools and educational institutions can not only communicate to raise local cultural and historical awareness but also encourage and facilitate their students and employees to experience these sites.
In conclusion, there are various causes why local people pay little attention to local museums and historical sites both subjective and objective perspectives. We should take the aforementioned measures to tackle this problem.
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