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Dec 29, 2009
Writing Feedback / Talk about how the poets show their respect to animals. [4]

Please help me. Thanks deeply!!:)

Respect Animals
The poems "Agamemnon" written by Celeste Perri, "Snake" written by D.H. Lawrence, and "Dreams of the Animals" written by Margaret Atwood all talk about animals. All of these poets show their respect to animals.

In similarity, they all used simile or metaphor to indicate that animals were kings. For instance, in the poems "Agamemnon", Perri thought her cat was Agamemnon, "king of Mycenae and commander in chief of the Greek army in the Trojan war, killed by his wife, Clytemnestra". When Perri's cat would "fall gently into sleep", she said "I felt like/ Clytemnestra in the bathtub, how she held/ that knife in her hand and stabbed and stabbed and stabbed". Perri thought her cat was a king, and she thought she was the king's wife. She felt so sad about her cat's death. In the poem "Dreams of the Animals", Atwood thought the animals were king. Atwood said "the iguana/ in the pet shop window/ on St. Catherine St./ crested, royal-eyed, ruling/ its kingdom of water-dish and sawdust". In the poem, "Snake", Lawrence thought the snake, which came to his house, seemed like a king. He said "[f]or he seemed to me again like a king,/ Like a king in exile, uncrowned in the underworld,/ Now due to be crowned again". A king is respected by all people. These poets thought those animals were kings, who can receive all respect. They show their respect to animals.

The other one, which shows their respect to animals, is that all three poets showed their sympathy and regret to the animals. Perri said "when I saw a grey cat on the side of/ the road and his face was all bloody and wrong/ and I cried and cried at the roadside/ because it was such a hot day, such a violently awful death." Perri was very sad and frustrated. She felt regret to kill her cat. She missed her cat so much. However, she could not her cat back any more. Atwood talked about the sadness of the animals who were in the zoo. Atwood said "the caged armadillo/ near the train/ station, which runs/ all day in figure eights/ its piglet feet pattering, no longer dreams/ but its insane when waking". Atwood talked that armadillo, which was in the zoo, was catatonic. These kinds of animals just repeated the same thing over and over again. Their mind was gone. They even could not control their lives. Atwood thought they were pathetic. Lawrence said "And immediately I regretted it./ I thought how paltry, how vular, what a mean act! I despised myself and the voices of my accursed human education". The snake did nothing to Lawrence. Nevertheless, he tried to kill it because of his education. He had doubt his education. These kinds of animals should be killed even though they did not do anything bad. Lawrence felt deeply regretful to the snake. These three poets felt sympathy to those animals because they respected those animals.

In conclusion, it is clear that the poets of "Agamemnon", "Dreams of the Animals" and "Snake" all respect animals. They thought animals were like kings to show their respect. They all felt sympathy and had regret to animals, also a sign of respect.
Dec 29, 2009
Writing Feedback / Talk about the metaphor of a movie "The PaintedVeil". [2]

Unveil the Painted Veil

The background of "The Painted Veil" was in a small village, in China, in the 1920s. It talks about a doctor whose name was Walter and his wife, Kitty, went to this village because of the cholera epidemic. The title of the movies, "The Painted Veil" is a metaphor.

At the beginning, when Walter first saw Kitty, he fell in love at once. Unfortunately, Kitty did not love Walter. However, when Kitty heard her mother talking about her, "I've given up on her", she was shocked and wanted to be away from her mother. Therefore, Kitty married Walter. Kitty, did not show her real thought, which was that she married Walter not because of love, but because she wanted to escape. This is a "veil". Then, Kitty went to Shanghai, where Walter was working. Once, they went to a theatre. There was an actress who sang the Opera, and she had the painted veil on her face. She spoke Chinese, so Charlie could tell Kitty a story, which was not true because Kitty could not speak Chinese. English-speaker could not understand what she meant and nobody knew the real face under the painted veil. It is the metaphor of the whole movie.

When Walter knew Kitty fell in love with Charlie, he had a talk with Kitty. "I knew you don't love me. You just wanted to leave your parents. But I hoped something will change". He unveiled the veil of Kitty, saying he knew she did not love him. He gave Kitty a choice, either go to the village, where people were getting cholera, or get divorced. Finally, Kitty went together with Walter because Charlie did not want to divorce her wife. One day, Kitty unveiled Charlie's painted veil through talking with Mr. Waddington, the neighbor of Kitty and Walter. She knew that Charlie usually made love with different women, and he was not as good as he looked like. There were some nuts in that village, and they looked very kind. They taught and gave food to the children, who were extremely poor. In fact, they did not do kind things. They just bought children from the poor families, and they tried to convert those children to Catholics. They had the painted veil as well.

After Kitty and Walter went to the village, Walter almost did not talk with Kitty any more. Mr. Waddington talked to Kitty, "Your husband never looks at you. He looks at the walls, the floor, his shoes." Kitty said "He has a great deal on his mind". Kitty asked Walter to not despise her, and Walter said, "No, I despise myself". Walter used apathy to cover up his love towards Kitty. When Kitty played the piano, Walter was listening outside the room. He remembered the first time they met. At first, when Walter met Kitty, he was just attracted by Kitty's beautiful look. He did not really know Kitty. Kitty was like a woman who was under a painted veil. Now, Walter began understanding Kitty gradually. At night, when Kitty and Walter went back to their house from Mr. Waddington's house, something changed. Walter went through the door, which was the "veil" between Kitty and Walter, and kissed Kitty and made love with Kitty. The veil between them was unveiled gradually.

When Kitty knew she was pregnant and had a rest on the bed, Walter unveiled the gauzy curtain of the bed. This is also a metaphor. When Walter knew Kitty's child maybe was not his, he said "It doesn't matter". The "veil" between Kitty and Walter was unveiled totally. Walter showed his deep love to Kitty. Unluckily, Walter got cholera suddenly, and after Kitty took care of him the whole night, he died in the morning. They buried Walter. It was a new "veil" between Kitty and Walter because Kitty did not have the chance to tell Walter if she loved him. Kitty's child was a "veil" too. We did not exactly know whose child he was.

To conclude, it is clear that "the painted veil" was through the whole movie. It was a metaphor of people's real thought. If people have the veil, covering their faces, others will never know their real opinion. When people life their painted veil, they can understand and know each other well.
Dec 29, 2009
Writing Feedback / Viet Nam traffic [7]

"In order to reduce the number of traffic accidents, we should seriously punish traffic violators, encourage people to obey traffic rules and limit the speed in all road. And we have to do it immediate."

I think there should be a Conjunction between violators and encourage. You shouldn't use "And" to start a sentence.