Undergraduate / Northwestern Supplement Seeking the Relationships Between the Outerworld Help [17]

i like your essay a lot. you write very eloquently!


as opposed to...


this ending keeps the reader's attention, but i feel it's kind of cheesy-ish. if you have the time, you should change it. it's not bad, just... idk...

can you look at my uchicago essay? kind of rough...

Undergraduate / idiosyncrasies or peculiarities about ourselves, UChicago essay [23]

i agree with all the comments above. i guess this essay is kind of decent, but you need to get more specific. your first essay, on the other hand, is marvelous!

can you check mine if you have the time? it's a chicago essay as well.

Undergraduate / Syracuse- influence, work, and experience [6]

great work! just one thing in general. "could" is a weaker word than is "would" or "want". i think it's better to use stronger words so that you come across as confident and determined. other than that, your responses are fantastic! good luck!