Undergraduate / SYRACUSE ESSAY 1,why syracuse 2,work experience and your gain 3,future plan [5]

You should definitely change up the name of the university in question 1! Don't make a mistake on that!

Undergraduate / Boston U essay- three qualities (inquisitive, trustworthy, passionate) [8]

Hi, I'm starting to write my BU supplements as well.
And I came across your essay.. I think it's a bit vague, as in you go around in circles in the beginning. Don't make the reader go "Huh?" and make everything more explicit, which will then help the flow of the paragraphs.

I like to have parallelism in my essays, so maybe you could try to list the three words that describe you the best in a formatted way, rather than just stating them out whenever you want to.

Hope that helps!

Undergraduate / Race is only skin deep Stony Brook (revision help) [4]

Honestly, I love it!
It is very sincere, and you have provided concrete examples.

- Don't forget to add quotations marks around "I'm Michelle."
- Add in the time period this took place