wmm88
Jun 28, 2020
Undergraduate / My own chords - Common App Essay [4]
I understood that Iwill would never ... unless I create created something of my own
I would also recommend perhaps mentioning something along the lines of "At college, I will bring an appreciation for everyone's talents, ideas, etc"
In addition, your last paragraph -- the sentence " Who I am does not always add ..." I would recommend rewording this in a way that doesn't make you look bad in front of some people, other than that, great job! The hook is terrific, and it is clear that you have a lot of potential to bring to the colleges you are attending!
I understood that I
I would also recommend perhaps mentioning something along the lines of "At college, I will bring an appreciation for everyone's talents, ideas, etc"
In addition, your last paragraph -- the sentence " Who I am does not always add ..." I would recommend rewording this in a way that doesn't make you look bad in front of some people, other than that, great job! The hook is terrific, and it is clear that you have a lot of potential to bring to the colleges you are attending!