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Sophie   
Jun 6, 2008
Writing Feedback / Topic 3: Any form of education other than co-education... [3]

Thank you your advise, I read ideas from the book in library,I don't know this book is copyrighted from this website. Thank your so much, I will think and learn,write my essay from my own words.
Sophie   
Jun 5, 2008
Writing Feedback / Topic 4: prohibite smoking in public places [3]

Topic 4:Some business now say that no one smoke cigarettes in any of their offices.Some governments have banned smoking in all public places.Do you agree or disagree?

Even thought it's true that there's definite link between smoking and bronchial trouble, lung cancer and heart desease, many government seem hear, see, smell no evil.A few nations have been taking timid measure. This essay will outline some of the problems against smoking in public places.

It is not difficult to understand why the official reactions to well documented medical research have been so lukewarm. The aim is simply financial profit. Tobacco is a wonderful source of revenue. For instance: in tax revenue alone, the government in Britain collects from smokers to pay for it's entire educational facilities.

The second point is that some contries use the short-sighted policy. It is a paradox that one million people through out the world, especially in Africa, are starving. While the helpless starve, an enormous amount of money is being spent on space exploration. The less fortunate people could greatly improve their lives without unemployment, poverty, and corroption if the authorities would give the right law for such money of sponsor from rich countries.

The further point is that most of cigarette companies spend vast amounts of money on advertising which is both insidious and dishonest. They never show the real smokers coughing up their lungs in the morning; that would never do. Their advertisement scheme depicts a great open-air life, the charming ladies, and true love. What utter nonsense!

Over all, I strongly feel that all governments could begin by banning advertising cigarettes in public places like cinemas, restaurants or mass transportation. My friends and I have been conducting an anti-smoking campaign in our town. Young people should be warned, of the dire consequences to follow this bad habit.
Sophie   
Jun 5, 2008
Writing Feedback / Topic 3: Any form of education other than co-education... [3]

Topic 3: Any form of education other than co-education is simply unthinkable do you agree or disagree?

While it is claim that some parents choose to impose such abnormal conditions on their children-the condition which they themselves wouldn't put up with for one minute, others believe that children from segregated schools have greater self-confidence when they leave school. This essay will analyze some of the benefits for co-educational system.

First of all, any discussion about this topic must question the aims of education. Pupils go to school to gain knowledge. Moreover, the cheif aim of education is to equip future citizens for adult society. Now our society is made up of men and women,so how can the segregated shools offer a right sort of preparation for pupils?Anyone enter the real society after years of segregation may only be in for a shock.

Secondly, boys and girls have been learning together because they have given the opportunities to know each other. A co-educational school offer children nothing less than a true version society. Students are able to compare each other in academic and athletic abilities and many of the extracurricular activities which are part of school life.

The further point is that co-educational schools encourage healthy attitudes to life. Boys don't grow up believing that women are airy goddesses. Girls also don't grow up imagining that men are romentic heroes in mythology or in movies. A majority of psychologis ague that physical and emotional adolescence best overcome in co-educational environment.Segregated schools sometimes provide the right conditions for sexual deviation. This is hardly possible in co-educational system.

In conclusion, I feel strongly that when the time comes for the pupils to leave school, they are fully prepared to enter the real society as well-adjusted adults. They have already had years of experience to solve problems that they face men and women.

Pls help me to corect grammar...If you think that words I use is not good,and You have many better. Pls share to me.I would like to get 7.5 IELTS. Thanks
Sophie   
May 14, 2008
Writing Feedback / many traditional values and customs have been lost. Pls check my essay. [5]

Thank you so much,my dear friend
I will be in France in September,2008. If U live in France,send email to me, I would like to invite you come to the beautiful beach in Nice where I am studying,and...hihihihi...I will cook some traditional vietnamese food for you.

I love bun ghia gho with nuk mhom= "Bu'n cha? gio`" and "nước mắm". But,if you live in America, I sure you can find some Vietnamese restaurant.

Best regards
Sophie   
Apr 4, 2008
Writing Feedback / many traditional values and customs have been lost. Pls check my essay. [5]

Dear Sarah, thank so much for your feedback. May you "bold" words so that I can know my mistake clearly. Like the first essay you have done for me.

Do you want to know "ao dai" and "non la" Vietnamese? How might I send photos to you?
I am in Asian, and I would like to cook my traditional food to you, if I have a chance..hihihihihi.
Sophie   
Apr 2, 2008
Writing Feedback / many traditional values and customs have been lost. Pls check my essay. [5]

Topic 2: People nowadays work hard to buy more things. This has made our lives generally more comfortable but many traditional values and customs have been lost and this is a pity. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In contemporary society, people who work much long hours to acquire material
possessions. While this make lives more convenient but many traditional values and
customs such as lack of the respect to elders, spend a little time to family or disappear of
specific food in Vietnamese dishes.

Nowadays, people who argue that a modern nuclear family with both mother and father
have to work out and give less attention to their children than in the past causing of
underperform at school. For instance, children never listen to the right, they are often
playing truant from school or rebel in adolescence. What schools discover is that many
people make very poor parents. Since children have so much contact with them in

formative years. A majority of psychologists agree that these years are fundamental to he
emotional and mental growth of the child. If children are not supervised by their childre,
they may not have opportunity to attend high education that is quite necessary in life.

Furthermore, being a busy person, father or mother has no more time to share ups and
downs to each member in family. They spend little time for preparing food at home that
is one of the most important time to not only children but also a couple after all long day
offices. Parents use much longer hours to increase their lifestyle, but so many many
traditional values are being lost such as specific food, like "banh beo, bo kho, hu tieu"
have been disappearing in most of families.

In addition, 'ao dai" is the symbolized for our nation through long time. Vietnamese
women look so charming and attractive when they wear "ao dai" with "non la". The fact
of the matter is that in the majority of public places likes offices, companies, factories,
theaters, cinemas, plazas, employees are not required to wear "ao dai" except high-schools.

Being a Vietnamese girl, I do love to wear "ao dai" for any occasion not because this is
our traditional clothes which are protected by me, youth person in modern life. But
because Vietnam is famous with "ao dai" to foreigners, whenever they see 'ao dai", they
will remember not only me but also my country with hospitality people.
Sophie   
Mar 21, 2008
Writing Feedback / what do you do for good health? pls check grammar and give some detail more [3]

It is a universal desire of mankind to maintain a healthy lifestyle. It leads to longer and happier life. Staying healthy means eating a well-balance diet, getting regular exercise, and avoiding things that are bad for the body and mind

Firstly, a well-balance diet is essential for not only children but also adult peoples. Nutrition plays a key role in maintaining good health and preventing many diseases Everyone can take good nutrition by following some basic rules such as eat food high in carbohydrates, avoid too much sugar and limit salt in take, eat lot of fruit and vegetable.

Secondly, a healthy life is an active life. A modern life with car, moto, elevator make human become lazy. That is the reason why people nowadays get many diseases more than their ancient. Lack of physical exercises can cause tiredness, and poor general health. Playing some sport or physical fitness like badminton, running, walking, tennis, swimming, volleyball, soccer, riding, and so on ...is necessary for good health.

Finally, to get good health people is required to say no to bad habits similar to smoking, drinking, overeating, and overworking. We should meet friends at weekend to have a cup of coffee, share many stories about life, family or travel to somewhere so that we might avoid situation that are constantly stressful.

To sum up, people can take their lives and happiness into their own hands. And the first step is maintaining a healthy lifestyle.
Sophie   
Mar 7, 2008
Writing Feedback / Integrated writing task: the growth of tourism [3]

The passage and the lecture share the same point of traveling. Humans long years ago have usually travel for certain reason such as: existence, natural resourses, hunting, trading, colonization, cultural and enrichment. During the seventeenth century to now, people took trips for education, scientific researches and exploration purposes.

However, the passage said that Ernest Hemingway, one of the travel herores, exposed the possibilities for journey of people to faraway land for adventure. The author of the lecture emphasized Hemingway not only an adventurer but also have great influent on tourism especially sports that require people know how to control and conquering nature like fishing and hunting.

Moreover, the lectures gave two new kind of traveling.One is ethnic tourism, other is environmental tourism. With ethnic tourism, people may improve their knowledge through the trips include traditional village, peoples home, observe social customs, see native artian crafts, or watch local ceremony so that we should preserve aboriginal culture to be in danger of assimilation into the larger society. Nowaday, people love to spend their free time to observe, to learn more and more about new lands, others nature (custumes, dance, song...) in other to enjoy the environmental tourism with the interesting journey in pure wilderness area where few people have gone before.

Generally, people like to travel to open their mind. Don't take anything,beside the beautiful photographes and don't let everything beside our footprints on the trips is the message we need to keep in mind.
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