nixgnoy
Feb 19, 2010
Essays / pros and cons of cars - developing my essay [11]
Dear ALL
I'v got a question: is it better to get a point ,then develop it, to support the opinion,than to get some points to support the opinion without developing these points in one paragraph?
for instance: topic: pros and cons of cars.
brainstrom: para1 opinion: pros and cons of cars(Background Information)
para2 topic sentence:cars have many pros
point1: convenience;
point2: boosting the development of economy;
point3: enhancing people's standard of living.
para3 topic sentence:however,cars also have many cons:
point1: pollution;
point2: traffic jam;danger;
point3: money-consuming things
contradiction:using clean-energy resources; improving road conditions;
indroducing stricter traffic laws;Money is worth spending
comparing with the happiness that cars bring
para4 conclusion: cars are good
then take the paragraph 2 for example, if I change it into this type:
para2 topic sentence: cars can enhancing people's standard of living.
support1: buying things easily
support2: travel easily
support3: can move to countryside enjoying pleasant environment
so,I'd like to ask u,which one is better? the first one or the last one?
in my view, the first one is a list of points without developing it,covering almost all aspects of the argument but it seems not to discuss the topic deeply.the last one,on the other hand,can discuss the topic deeply,but it seems not to cover all aspects of the topic.It's really a question disturbing me! HELP!
Thank u for ur time to read my letter.
looking forward to hearing from u
Yours Faifully,
Peter
Dear ALL
I'v got a question: is it better to get a point ,then develop it, to support the opinion,than to get some points to support the opinion without developing these points in one paragraph?
for instance: topic: pros and cons of cars.
brainstrom: para1 opinion: pros and cons of cars(Background Information)
para2 topic sentence:cars have many pros
point1: convenience;
point2: boosting the development of economy;
point3: enhancing people's standard of living.
para3 topic sentence:however,cars also have many cons:
point1: pollution;
point2: traffic jam;danger;
point3: money-consuming things
contradiction:using clean-energy resources; improving road conditions;
indroducing stricter traffic laws;Money is worth spending
comparing with the happiness that cars bring
para4 conclusion: cars are good
then take the paragraph 2 for example, if I change it into this type:
para2 topic sentence: cars can enhancing people's standard of living.
support1: buying things easily
support2: travel easily
support3: can move to countryside enjoying pleasant environment
so,I'd like to ask u,which one is better? the first one or the last one?
in my view, the first one is a list of points without developing it,covering almost all aspects of the argument but it seems not to discuss the topic deeply.the last one,on the other hand,can discuss the topic deeply,but it seems not to cover all aspects of the topic.It's really a question disturbing me! HELP!
Thank u for ur time to read my letter.
looking forward to hearing from u
Yours Faifully,
Peter