djanat
Mar 9, 2010
Writing Feedback / GRE issue 153 skepticism in studying [5]
lee
you have some problem with the grama.
here are some corrections
1-we say " we were born".
2-people point out / without "S" .
3-i did not understand "...students should think whatever are taught". try to give a clear and simple sentences.
4-we say "...afraid of..." not "....afraid to..."
5-in the 9th line: ....makes student to think..." is " make student think .
try to respect the cordination between the subject and the conjugaison of the verb .we add '''s" only in the present tense for "he, she, it".
6-in the 14th line: so after....so as. repetition of so.
7- line 16: we say " prohibit from" . chech the meaning of this verb , i do not think is the right for what you want to say.
- who is "he"? if you want to talk about the students , do not use "he" , use "they".
- WASTE time and energy
8- line 18: it is better to say "...to be guided first by..."
9- line 19 : ...contribute in...
i hope my notes will help you .i advice you to make a short and clear sentences.
lee
you have some problem with the grama.
here are some corrections
1-we say " we were born".
2-people point out / without "S" .
3-i did not understand "...students should think whatever are taught". try to give a clear and simple sentences.
4-we say "...afraid of..." not "....afraid to..."
5-in the 9th line: ....makes student to think..." is " make student think .
try to respect the cordination between the subject and the conjugaison of the verb .we add '''s" only in the present tense for "he, she, it".
6-in the 14th line: so after....so as. repetition of so.
7- line 16: we say " prohibit from" . chech the meaning of this verb , i do not think is the right for what you want to say.
- who is "he"? if you want to talk about the students , do not use "he" , use "they".
- WASTE time and energy
8- line 18: it is better to say "...to be guided first by..."
9- line 19 : ...contribute in...
i hope my notes will help you .i advice you to make a short and clear sentences.