Posts by yangzom

yangzom

May 21, 2010

Essays / learn about essay, my self in interview in my career in finance [7]

Hey Rozie,
It was nice to going through your writing. I think self interview is not really difficult as you think. The basic thing is that you need to improve your English. Once you improved your English then, i guess, you don't need to strive for writing essay and interview.

yangzom

May 20, 2010

Writing Feedback / Should crimes committed many years ago be forgotten? - Essay writing advice [7]

Hi,
Your essay is nice but somewhere, there are many run-on sentences. If i am not wrong! Basically, my English is not good enough to correct some one's essay.

May be i am wrong! Overall your essay is great and such a bombastic words that you had used. Great!

yangzom

May 19, 2010

Writing Feedback / "True beauty" is the good humanity [5]

Thank you Jonathan, I am trying my best to improve my English writing. I don't know why i am always confuse about the grammer. I know present, past and future. Also the past perfect...,...,... and the rules of grammer. But whenever i try to write English, they is always grammer mistakes. Can you please give me some tips that will improve my writing.

Thank You!

yangzom

May 14, 2010

Writing Feedback / "True beauty" is the good humanity [5]

Everyone does have their own view of "True Beauty." As far as my opinion, my true beauty is the good humanity.

I remember the day of my old school that we had discussion on the true beauty topic. Many of my friends were arguing that their true beauty is a girl with a sexy body and a nice shape. During that period, we all were young and we have no idea of these things. Only we can see was beautiful lady on a heavy make-up.

As we grown up, we now realized the true meaning of beauty. Beauty doesn't count as an external looks only. The main part of the beauty is the one's internal behavior.

For example; Nelson Mandela, Ghandiji, The Dalai lama, Martinlutha King and more. They are the one whom i do present as the "True Beauty". These are the people who severed their nation no matter what happened to them. Because of their true inner beauty, this young generation people eager to call them as a true beauty.

hey everyone,
looks like my essay has a lot of grammer mistake ... could you please check it and explain me well.
thank you.
Need help! truely!

yangzom

May 11, 2010

Essays / Personal, Persuasive and Research essays - struggling to write them [4]

Hi frd,
I jusr came to open my essay and i saw your page. I guess you were stuck in these eassy topic which was given by your teacher. Umm!.. For my concern, the way you wrote the English on top. Looks like you are good writing. So, i think its not difficult to you to write this simple eassy.

Try... you will get it!...

yangzom

May 10, 2010

Essays / If i have million dollars I would help these organizations... [4]

If i have a million dollar than, i would definitely love to donate to the organizations.
The reason why i choose organization is because In this world, they are many people who are suffering and desperate in needs of help.

Organization that i choose is the "Orphan Children Organization".
Children who does not have parents and no place to lived. Although i cannot be their real parents but at least, i could help them to bring out of the bad situations. By offering them a good educations, healthy foods and taking care of their life.

Helping these Orphan Children Organization makes my life reasonable and a kind human being. Finally, I would like to suggest to the rich people that never try to waste your money for nothing. Its better you help to the people who needs you. That will brought you a true meaning of life and happiness!

yangzom

May 6, 2010

Undergraduate / Disappointments in Life; 'never lose infinite hope' [7]

hi, my name is kash. i saw your essay and i am impressed. Your English is long and well organize. May be bit omit in grammer. Good luck! My English writing is sucks. need to improve in writing.

yangzom

May 6, 2010

Essays / If i have million dollars I would help these organizations... [4]

hello everyone, could you please write an essay about the above topic.
Today, i went to take GED writing test. Thats my second writing test. My first one got a 0 marks. Its because of misunderstanding the topic. This time, i have no idea....weather i will pass or fail. I am so nervous.

The above topic is the GED test writing essay. If u don't mind to jot some essay about this topic. So, i can learn from my mistake or i will think to take ESL class instead of wasting my time to take GED. I just need a good options!... please let me know about my English writing too.. my most weakness is, i don't read book at all. My laziness!

Whoever put me some tips, i am very much appreciated! thanks!