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help- topic: problems encounter with not speaking english in america [6]
How about starting your first paragraph by condensing your first two sentences into one main idea. For example:With the increasing degree of globalization, and perhaps the growing influence of Western culture, economy, and diplomacy, the English language has become an essential tool for successfully navigating the obstacles inherent with international communication.The next sentence could be shortened as well. You could say,There are many problems facing non-English speaking immigrants in America. Some of these problems
include conversational misunderstanding, isolation from others, and
difficulty in obtaining simple necessities.
The inability to fully express a person's feelings may cause misunderstandings. A person who doesn't know how to speak English fluently may have a hard time
communicating his true intentions with a limited vocabulary.
Sometimes a non-native English speaker may have difficulties
finding the appropriate words to
convey what he really wants to say.
The inaccurate construction of his grammar may also add to the confusion.Remove the first sentence of the third paragraph, it is not necessary to define a common word.If a person is having difficulties speaking English, he will also have a hard time making friends because he doesn't feel confident speaking the language. He will feel
isolated because he
cannot communicate very well with others. Just like Yifeng
(Who is Yifeng? Perhaps you should explain briefly who Yifeng is prior to this sentence), he was lonely. He spent his time
isolated in the stone-stepped library where he studied endlessly. He
never ventured out to meet people.
Instead, he spent his free time in the kitchen
learning how to cook.
A person may have difficulties in
acquiring the
simple everday necessities if
he or she is not fluent in the English language. He
or she would have a hard time
shopping for food in a grocery store.
Allergies have no relevence to your argument here, you can remove that part of the sentence, along with the next. Instead you could say,He or she would find it troublesome to ask for assistance from employees or to deal with the cashier.Also, if upon eating in a restaurant, he or she would have a hard time communitcating with the server.Hope that helps.
