Writing Feedback / People attend university because they want to prepare themselves for future career [3]

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Topic : People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, and increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Essay:
In modern life, knowledge is a power for man to success; we see more people apply for college or university for many different reasons. In my opinions I think people attend university because they want to prepare themselves for future career.

Everyone needs to have a special skill to find a suitable job then will help them earn money to feed themselves. Working environment increasingly requires higher skills and labor market become a fierce competition market. So everyone needs to prepare knowledge by the ways participate to university to acquaint some special field that we will meet again in future. Academic will be a foundational for beginning and in practically will teach us how to solve problems in the real work situations.

For example in this days in our country, if we have just finished in high school we will difficult to find a gentle job, because at least to become a worker the company also require you this level. So if you want to become accountant or officer in bank we need graduate from college or university to comprehension in that professional field.

The high education will open a expansion roads for people in life, they have more chances than the lower education to touch a good career, well-paid, and a luxuries life. Company always care more about your knowledge background when they looking for a new employees and sure that if you have a well qualify in mathematic or languages you can won the other who shortage this thing. Thus we can see some last year students were chosen for future employees before they finish university

Actually I know that some people did not attend to university but also be famous and rich, but I think we cannot waiting for successful if you do not have any preparing

Writing Feedback / Advertising nowadays has more and more affects in our lives. [6]

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Advertising nowadays more and more affects in our lives, we can see advertise everywhere such as : televisions, newspapers, radio, buses, and many places in our city. They support much kind of products to achieve their high sales and help them easy to touch the customers.

But in another cases sometime they overstate the truth and make the customers confuse, so once or twice we will buy a product but they don't have enough qualifies like advertising talk about them, that is the bad things because it make us lost the trust with products of that company. For example I bought a washing machine because I saw they advertise that 100% washing clean, but actually when I bought it , it worked so bad, I waste a lot of time to complaint with that company and require them to change another one.

I agree that we should use advertise like the best way to present our products to customers , it make many kinds of business can develop by the way affect to mutual, beside that customer will have more information about products to help them easy to compare and chose a the good once. But I think the Market Management Offices should find the good methods to control the information in advertising, these jobs will compel the company more respect to customers and help in our country have a good market environment to attract more investors.

I think in our modern life, we have many ways to improve our sales but I think the company should choose the ways that for a long life of product, we should tell the truth and do the right things. That will make the company have strength in their business and pride of themselves about what did they do.