Undergraduate / "doll making"-my common app short answer(extracurriculum activity) [4]

I like the way you started it. In fact, I like everything about your first paragraph. But "Hold there" sounds a little awkward... shouldn't it be "Hold on"?

Household craps? I hope you mean "household scraps". I think you should move "All my dolls are made of household craps. The Ordinary generate the extraordinary through my imagination and bare hands." above into the first paragraph, then the last sentence can continue on from "...magnificent future."

Just my two cents. Good luck!

Undergraduate / "Rhetorical Analysis of YouTube Comments"-CommonApp Essay [8]

I personally find this essay very well written - it says a great deal about you as well as your understanding of other people. Good luck with it!

Undergraduate / Who would you like to bring do your backyard (Karen) - NYU application [3]

I really like your choice of person - at least you're not one of those pretentious people who say they want to bring Socrates to their hometown to discuss views on existentialism or whatever.

Just one change, take out the "New York" bit from "New York band..."

Overall, sounds great - Good luck!

Undergraduate / What does global university mean to you? (NYU Essay) [6]

me21900 is right.

Great essay, well structured, fantastic reasoning behind it. However, there is a character limit and you have exceeded it. You will have to cut down all the superfluous details and just get straight to the point, you want NYU because you want more.