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susu

Sep 18, 2010

Writing Feedback / My shoulder and my friend - journal writing [3]

Since yesterday my shoulder has been appropriately operating, which means that whenever I try to use my shoulder to grab or pull something to me, I feel a nasty pain. The pain goes far beyond my expectation; it has led me to oversleeping. So, I will focus only on restoring my shoulder, rather than exercising.

I revised your intro a little.

I got a phone call last night from my friend while having dinner. She told me that she wanted to come see me as soon as possible, and she wished to stay away from her current complexities.

maybe explain some of the complexities in a sentence or so?

I wish she could come today since I ~~also~~ would like to get away from what I am doing and rationally stare at myself from a far distance. Someone one said that we should feel fun and satisfied with whatever we do and have it as the main job, if possible. I know that is very true and it used to inspire me, yet I found it horribly difficult to keep it in mind: it might help people achieve and become satisfied with themselves, but not applicable to me.

That is a run on sentence, try breaking it up.
Sometimes, when I do not feel satisfied with what I do, I always criticize me for not feeling satisfied with myself . There was the rub: The attempt that I tried to feel happy with undermines and harms myself. Could it be a good way to apply to me? No way. I found a medicine that perfectly works for me - it is widely known way: it is to chant 'thank you for ___' throughout the day whenever it comes up to me, no matter what. I can fill the blank with food, clothes, friends, appearance, weather and so on and on. The blank can be filled with bad circumstances: fear, tiredness, difficulty, or whatever. By chanting this sentence we can offset and phase out fear, tiredness, difficulty and so forth and so on because it no longer harasses me as long as it is a source to thank for.

I think its great your write for yourself too and not just for assignments.

susu

Sep 17, 2010

Undergraduate / "A job at a customer service based retailer" - my short answer for undergrad transfer [7]

chrypchk
Working in retail can be a little tryingdo you mean tiring? and in my case it tried me a lot. Sure I was efficient and detail oriented, but I was equal parts short-tempered and impatient. Then I started a new job at Coach, which is a highly customer service based retailer, at least more so than my previous employers. Although I had over ten years of experience I felt like a fish out of water and that my bad habits would rear their ugly heads and shame me among my coworkers. I learned, however indirectly from my colleagues, that I might not be able to control the situation but I am in charge of my own response to it. Today I am thankful that lesson hit home sooner rather than later and grateful to be able to surround myself with those that challenge me to be a better person.

susu

Sep 16, 2010

Undergraduate / "fast-paced city, clubs, opportunities" - Why Brown? [3]

Hi, can someone please read my essay and tell me what you think?
1000 character max, I have 1300.
Please and thank you. P.S. the city I'm talking about is NYC for clarification

Why Brown? I'm 18 characters over, help!

As a curious freshman I picked up a book of colleges while organizing the College and Career section of my school library and began reading it when Brown caught my eye. I approached my seminar teacher and asked him if he knew anything about the school. He told me that it was a great Ivy and Providence was nice town. Not knowing what that meant, I didn't proceed any further into the conversation. After delving into Brown's courses, different International Relations tracks and the Brown EcoReps I knew this is where I belonged. I mean where else are you free to take a class on contemporary graphic novels or the history of hip-hop? However the most enchanting factor is being able to get the full learning experience because I would never have to be in a classroom with students who don't want to be there. Also coming from such a populated fast-paced city it would be a novel experience to tone it down and feel like part of a cohesive community. All in all, by becoming a brunonian the possibilities are endless.

Why are you drawn to the academic fields you indicated in Question #6?
Note: I took out their names because I didn't want it to come up when people google them.

Economics, diplomacy, world health issues, gender relations and urbanization are just some of the issues I will get to learn about in the Political Economy and Development track of International Relations at Brown. In just one major I will get to learn about topics from other majors as well (I hate the way this sentence sounds). With a (minor or double major) in environmental studies I will continue learning about the different issues our planet faces and gain the tools to construct realistic solutions that benefit multiple parties. The combination of these two majors will help me succeed in a career in Environmental Law. (need help with good transition)

After engaging in conservations with brunonians, -------- founder Pencils of Promise and ------- founder of Dress for Success who both started successful non-profits at such a young age armed with just the education they they received. I know that I will gain the tools and knowledge to make an impact in the world no matter what route I end up in at Brown.