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Posts by Alamanda Bud
Joined: Sep 18, 2010
Last Post: Mar 16, 2013
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Alamanda Bud   
Mar 16, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS; Loosing Traditional Values is no matter? [5]

Wow, your essay's pretty good. Your point of view is stated clear. I can't find any grammar errors and I like the way you prove your points with the example and the "what would happen" question which is a very strong argument, I must say.
Alamanda Bud   
Mar 16, 2013
Grammar, Usage / Help with sentence revision/ word choice [3]

achieved to .

In my opinion, your sentence doesn't make sense when you wrote like that.

With children's minds comparable to sponges

You did not post the full sentence or at least a paragraph (seems like you missed a bracket), I can't tell what you are trying to talk about in this sentence so I just guess, excuse me if I got it wrong. First of all, "comparable" is an adj meaning something is able to be compared to something, I think you use the wrong word. Second, your sentence need a verb. Finally, if I were you, I would write it in a simple way like this: "Because children's minds is like sponges, it is easy for them to learn to see body ideals dictated by society; however, these negatively affect and change their lives."
Alamanda Bud   
Sep 28, 2010
Writing Feedback / Traffic in Viet Nam: Reasons and Solutions [5]

In Viet Nam, the number of death by traffic accident is considered as large as the number of death by plague. There's about more than 30 people die everyday.

With the traffic conditions in Vietnam, accident is object to happen. The roads are too narrow to travel easily. Moreover, many pot-holes can appear everywhere to threaten the goers. On the roads, there're sometimes the illogical roundabouts. They are not only useless, but also make the traffic more chaotic. To solve this problem, we only have one way, it's improving the road. However, it is impossible for the government to widen the roads because of limited land. Whenever the roads are repaired, the traffic is more dangerous with the unfinished structures. People still travel on the repairing roads, and the roads are more and more narrow. We also can build the tunnels but it is very costly. Viet Nam has to borrow money from other countries and no one knows when the government can pay it back. As you know, Viet Nam is a monsoonal tropical country, it has a lot of rain every year. During the rainy season, the roads are flooded because all the waste pipes are stuck by rubbish and become very dirty.

In addition, the tense of Vietnamese people is poor. The roads in the cities are choked with so many vehicles such as motorbikes, bicycles, taxies, buses, cyclos and pedestrians because people do not follow the laws well. They even don't obey the traffic lights or signs. Children are taught about traffic laws while adults are breaking it. Now, the government gives many new strict laws to improve the present posture. Polices are more active than they used to. Everyone travel on motorbike wears helmet naturally without any enforcement. The traffic is better and better day by day.

In conclusion, with many measures now, the traffic in Viet Nam will be good one day. Despite the poor conditions Viet Nam can solve this problem themselves by the development of economic.
Alamanda Bud   
Sep 18, 2010
Writing Feedback / The importance of vocational guide in secondary school [4]

The aim of many people is to have a stable life with their spouse and some children. Having an ideal job can help you reach this goal. It's difficult to find a job that suits you most. Therefore, students from secondary school have vocational guide early.

Thanks to vocational guide, they can know some general information about many jobs such as the requirements, expectances, working environment, the advantaged and disadvantaged when choose those jobs too.

First of all, the requirements of a job is the imperative conditions for anyone who wants to do this job. When you know what it need you will be able to satisfy these requirements. If it is out of your reach, you still have time to try your best because you are just a secondary student.

Secondly, the expectances of a job is very important. Is this job good or bad? Does it pay well? Does it give us a lot of occupations? Can I have chance to win promotion? These questions help you decide which job can bring you success.

Thirdly, whenever you go to work, you must think of your working environment. If you work in international environment, you should have an excellent English and good soft skills. Moreover, you have to be more dynamic and creative than you are in a national company. From secondary school, you will have a long preparation for all of these.

Fourthly, when you choose this job, what will you get and what will you lose? Everything has its own advantaged and disadvantaged side. A job with high salary can take you a lot of time and you have to be under great pressure of competition with your colleagues. Before make any decisions, you must think over and over again.

Finally, the vocational guide in secondary school is necessary. Every student has time to think about their future job and prepare for it. However, teacher should not use theory so much, the practical trip to some company to introduce about jobs is more effective and lively.
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