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Sep 27, 2010
Undergraduate / "To Have Pride" UT Transfer Admissions Essay. Topic A [3]

Here is my other essay. I worry that i may have talked about one subject longer than it should have been. Like.. maybe i should have talked about what austin can offer me more? not sureee. Thanks!

To have pride is to have self-respect, feel personal worth, and attain the utmost confidence in no matter what you do. I'll admit I found my inner self a little slower than others. But I eventually got to where I wanted to be, nonetheless. By finding myself, I discovered that I am an imaginative, determined, and justly prideful individual. What I saw in my dreams will become the big picture I deserved to hold firmly.

Growing up, everybody was always so sure of what they wanted their perfect picture to be. I had an idea of what I wanted, but I was never sure. I knew I loved animals, but math and science proved to be a hindrance. Nevertheless, I was sure that once I got to college, my love for animals would defeat the difficulty of math and science. My thirst for knowledge, however, shot me down. It was at that moment of my freshman year where I, once again, had to re-evaluate what path in life I wanted to take. For what I lacked in academics, I made up in branching myself to different experiences. The one thing I always knew was that I wanted to be different. If it was stereotyped that Asians were always in orchestra, then that wasn't what I wanted. I immersed myself in drum line, multicultural organizations, and became the youngest manager of a restaurant I ever knew. I set out to be different. I set out to have great credentials one would never see. I wanted to be the unique one.

Coming back from my freshman year, I started with finding out what I wanted to obtain in the next 5 years. I wanted experiences nobody could ever take from me; and that I did. The months where I learned about myself the most was when I got a job as a hostess. Wanting to be diverse, I decided to give the restaurant industry a chance. Because of my devoted, detailed, and excelling efforts, my boss saw enough potential in me to guide me through the steps to being a well-rounded manager. Through the six months of being in a superior position, I matured with wisdom words to offer to my employees. I was able to lead them, ensuring them to go above and beyond the call-of-duty, and achieve goals. At times I saw it as a set-back, but I always knew it would make my cup halfway full. I enjoy interacting with regular customers, and receiving feedback of recognition for my hard work.

I regret taking the CAP program I was offered for granted. However, I do not regret all the things I have learned and all the experiences I have gained from the years I did not persistently try getting into University of Texas at Austin. With my interest in linguistics, creativity, and communication; I believe both the Textiles and Apparel Marketing or Linguistics department can offer much more beyond what is expected. I want the endless lists of internships, groups, and events in which I can participate to further the reduction of my fear of making the wrong choices. I want to be able to contribute my individuality and creativity where I can't do anywhere else. Most of all, I desire to pride fully say that The University of Texas at Austin is where I graduated and gained majority of my untouchable experiences from. What I could not accomplish before, I always persevere to accomplish deeper.
taytayy   
Sep 27, 2010
Undergraduate / "Language Barrier" - Common Application Additional Information Section [9]

I agree with uchihakula. Beware of making yourself sound weak. Not knowing english should be written in a way of how it strengthened you, but not how it held you back. In my opinion, I would write about what you gained, and about what you can improve on. Too much "I had too's". College admissions would not appreciate whining. Instead of I had to... another option could be like. i was given five page essays... I attended ESL classes. I hesitated bothering teachers..
taytayy   
Sep 27, 2010
Undergraduate / "Maturing from your mistakes" Topic of choice essay [3]

I really like the story you chose to back up your essay on maturity!

My favorite part is :
"Falling off a stone, cemented staircase earning myself scraped knees, elbows and a nosebleed made me realize crying won't get me anywhere. " Indeed, trying to be hardcore gets you nowhere. Only by getting back up and embracing your mistakes can you get started.

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Being at work after school has become such a daily routine that nothing spectacular ever happens while sitting on this white chair. Delivering prescriptions within walking distance without much interference or trouble was as simple as putting biscuit into a basket until that one afternoon, which felt like the end of the world, made me realize a valuable life lesson.

"Thank you, that would be $5.09," I [insert whatever adjective.. happily.. nonchalantly, mindlessly...i dono.. said as I handled the money and she signed off her prescription. The day felt never-ending and energizing as I walked back to the pharmacy only soon to find myself in misery. I walked in with a delightful smile and gave the pharmacist the signed paper till that one question struck my mind. "Where's the money?" Anxiously, I rambled through my pockets endlessly searching for it only to find myself in distress. I bolted out the door and backtracked my way through - no luck. The pharmacist told me it was okay and to just not repeat the same mistake again,but instead, learn from it. Even though it was a small mistake, I just couldn't let it go at that moment for it was such a simple task that shouldn't be mistaken.

I sat there, emotionless, as the images kept repeating itself,which I couldn't manage to bring it to a stop. Abruptly, I reminisced of a time in my childhood whenThe time when falling off staircases was almost like a hobby for me. Tumbling down a one story high, metal-like staircase, and effortlessly crying was a challenge. Falling off a stone, cemented staircase earning myself scraped knees, elbows , and a nosebleed made me realize crying won't get me anywhere. But rather to stand up, learn from what you did wrong, and don't not dwelling over your mistakes. And so, I went straight back to work and did what I needed to do because mistakes are obstacles in life in which you must overcome to better yourself. I continued being hardworking everyday, to show the pharmacist and myself that I'm capable of overcoming problems and that I refuse tonot muddle over it them.

Maturing is what helps build you into a stronger person because you'll know your rights from your wrongs. Having this job definitely helped me for not only did I learn to stand up from my mistakes,

-->I learned to handle money and that money doesn't come to you, you have to earn it. But because of this job, I grew to love helping people in which will pursuit me in my goal of being a nurse. "I learned to handle money" does not fit in with the rest of the sentence...not sure what you are trying to say there.

my grammar is not the greatest.. but i tried. there you go!
taytayy   
Sep 27, 2010
Undergraduate / "The Real Purpose of Social Networks" UT Transfer Admissions Essay [6]

Prompt:
Choose a personal, school related, local, political, or international issue - and write an essay in which you explain the significance of that issue to yourself, your family, your community, or your generation.

This is what I kind of have so far. I feel that it could be a little more organized. I'm afraid that it might seem like i'm rambling and the main point is not distinguished. But like my title says, I basically wanted to point out that nobody really connects these days. The use of social networks isn't to bridge long lost friends but is now used as a tool to branch out your life to other's in meaningless ways.

"I awaken from the morning light, and crawl up to my living room couch. Routinely, I turn on my computer and check up on the social news of other people, which feeds my interest. As I begin to scroll through facebook, all I see are unnecessary status about how one got drunk the previous night, or how much of a brainless individual one can be. As it is tempting to wonder who this "girl who'll never have a life" must be, I stop myself from being a part of this story.

These days, I get invitations to join every kind of social network possible. My eyes sweep through my e-mail as I see the variety of Asian-interest networks, social network sites for people who just want friends (even if they are strangers), and networks for you to simply get connected to your own friends. Facebook, with 150 million active users today, used to be an exclusive site made for alumnus to be able to find each other through the years. It didn't matter if you wanted to join or not, you couldn't get in unless you were exclusively invited by someone who went to your high school approved that you, indeed, graduated from the same school. Social networks have strayed very far from its true purpose in the past few years. Today, as I mentioned previously, all I see are a sea of tearful words made public, people posting pictures to prove to others they have a social life other than the internet, or people making false promises. It is all about reputation on social networks in this generation.

All day, I read false promises where friends/acquaintances promise to hang out with each other, but never actually make the effort to proceed with the next step. "Hey! Yeah, We'll definitely hangout. Just call me!" Everybody throws it around like it's the new hello. But when I read it I expect it. It really made me think what Facebook has become when my close childhood friend messaged me on a late afternoon. Unlike the her I use to know, the message she heartedly wrote read how she missed the old times as she dug through the letters I wrote to her when I moved to unfamiliarity. A message like that was something I thought I'd never receive; it made me grateful that somebody truly appreciates the reason social networks exists. There was the thought put into the greeting, there was the bridge connecting two friends, and there was the definition of a friendship."

Thanks!
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