Absinthe
Oct 28, 2010
Undergraduate / "TV station internship" short answer for common app [3]
thanks Nisha!!!
ur really helpful ^
thanks Nisha!!!
ur really helpful ^
Absinthe
Oct 25, 2010
Undergraduate / "The Limit Does Not Exist" Common App Activity Essay [13]
wow! I really like it!
It's brief and effective. Good enough!
If you add an example into the passage, just a short one, maybe it'll be better?
wow! I really like it!
It's brief and effective. Good enough!
If you add an example into the passage, just a short one, maybe it'll be better?
Absinthe
Oct 25, 2010
Undergraduate / "TV station internship" short answer for common app [3]
Hi, this is my short answer for common app about my work experience.
Please feel free to criticize it and give me some advice!
Thank you!
"Camera ready, action....cut,shoot again. Action!" I hold the magnesium lamp and listened to director repeated those words tirelessly all summer. Working in TV station was much harder than I imagined. As an audience, I used to ridicule some TV programs but after six weeks' practicing I couldn't laugh out any more because I've known clearly that every episode need to be planned in weeks advance and entailed countless considerations, from buying water to contacting shooting place. What behind the TV screen are enormous efforts and sweat.
However, working with the director made me comprehend more about film arts. Expressing one's inner world and presenting it to people through visual pattern are so attractive though the hardship. Repeating a scene constantly is like to practice one's dream step by step. On the last day, when walked into the tool room and saw those cinemicrographic machines, I just felt peaceful. (148/150 words)
Thanks for reading it!
best wishes
Hi, this is my short answer for common app about my work experience.
Please feel free to criticize it and give me some advice!
Thank you!
"Camera ready, action....cut,shoot again. Action!" I hold the magnesium lamp and listened to director repeated those words tirelessly all summer. Working in TV station was much harder than I imagined. As an audience, I used to ridicule some TV programs but after six weeks' practicing I couldn't laugh out any more because I've known clearly that every episode need to be planned in weeks advance and entailed countless considerations, from buying water to contacting shooting place. What behind the TV screen are enormous efforts and sweat.
However, working with the director made me comprehend more about film arts. Expressing one's inner world and presenting it to people through visual pattern are so attractive though the hardship. Repeating a scene constantly is like to practice one's dream step by step. On the last day, when walked into the tool room and saw those cinemicrographic machines, I just felt peaceful. (148/150 words)
Thanks for reading it!
best wishes
Absinthe
Oct 25, 2010
Undergraduate / "while appreciating my brother's help" - common app essay [7]
it's good.
But if the last paragraph which demonstrates your feelings can be longer, it may look better
just my own opinion :)
best wishes
it's good.
But if the last paragraph which demonstrates your feelings can be longer, it may look better
just my own opinion :)
best wishes
Absinthe
Oct 25, 2010
Undergraduate / "in the hospital with my brother" - The day that changed my life [7]
Hi Ashley,
i really like your paper! It's impressive!
But you use lots of the space to describe the event. I think maybe you can express your feelings and talk about yourself more.
emmm my own idea.
GL~
Hi Ashley,
i really like your paper! It's impressive!
But you use lots of the space to describe the event. I think maybe you can express your feelings and talk about yourself more.
emmm my own idea.
GL~
Absinthe
Oct 19, 2010
Undergraduate / "To explore myself and my world" - Why Notre Dame Essay [5]
thanks!!
i've found my passage is too common..
thanks!!
i've found my passage is too common..
Absinthe
Oct 16, 2010
Undergraduate / "To explore myself and my world" - Why Notre Dame Essay [5]
Heyyyyy here is my essay on the topic "Why are you interested in attending the University of Notre Dame?"
Plz criticize it and give me some suggestions!
Thanks a lot!
Good luck~
When I opened the website of Notre Dame at first time, the initial footnote of this school left in my mind was "a place to think". Dark color, peaceful campus picture, compact page layout struck me a lot and I began to believe it was the very place I desired to go and live during my valuable college life.
I'm a thinker. I'd like to contemplate and instropect my life from details to future plans. Although I can't figure out origin of the universe and reasons of chemical reactions, I still want to try my best to make everyone around my life feel better. Notre Dame as a Catholic university can offer me greatest spiritual education like theology and philosophy. There is no doubt I will be inspired and guided to think with advanced level. And only at Notre Dame, I can pursue more reflections and explore myself, also my world.
Heyyyyy here is my essay on the topic "Why are you interested in attending the University of Notre Dame?"
Plz criticize it and give me some suggestions!
Thanks a lot!
Good luck~
When I opened the website of Notre Dame at first time, the initial footnote of this school left in my mind was "a place to think". Dark color, peaceful campus picture, compact page layout struck me a lot and I began to believe it was the very place I desired to go and live during my valuable college life.
I'm a thinker. I'd like to contemplate and instropect my life from details to future plans. Although I can't figure out origin of the universe and reasons of chemical reactions, I still want to try my best to make everyone around my life feel better. Notre Dame as a Catholic university can offer me greatest spiritual education like theology and philosophy. There is no doubt I will be inspired and guided to think with advanced level. And only at Notre Dame, I can pursue more reflections and explore myself, also my world.