nice! at least it will be a breaker from all the other monotonous essays..i have no particular comments other than the fact that Rice is looking for the quality of writing (read the prompt). a better part of it is written in a very "facebooky" manner, which does not show your writing skills (i hope they are much better than this). but hey, risky can have greater odds
all in all, its a good piece for a free application, something an indian like you wouldn't let go off right ;)
For some reason your Indian accent is very apparent =]
yea so i don't know how an indian accent can be apparent from a written piece...but i surely see your psychology working; maybe it stemmed from the "Growing up in India" part. although to get rid of assumptions should be a critic's main goal, the lack of which worries me about the legitimacy of your critique
liken tuje mera essay aacha laga sunke kushi hui ;)
to the rest of critiques, i am grateful for all that you guys have pointed out
hi guys i know the deadline has already been passed and i did submit this essay..i just wanted to know what you guys thought of it..my parents liked it so i simply turned it in..what do you think?
What motivated you to apply to Rice University? Please be specific and limit your response to 200 words.
The fact that Rice University shares its name with the most common staple food in the world, and the thought of wearing a "Rice Alum" shirt in the future only to see people bewildered at my craziness are two of the many exciting reasons that motivated me to apply! Besides its name, what truly drew me closer to Rice University were the amazing research facilities. Its multi-billion dollar endowment will surely contain the gargantuan research ambitions I will carry with me from my high school career to college. In addition to that, the location of Rice University makes it a perfect destination for my future studies. With my relatives living just minutes away from the campus, I can easily drop by their houses on weekends for laundry and homemade food. I have met people from various cultures in the last three years, something that overwhelmed me after coming from a monotonous Indian society. However gradually as I started to enjoy the variety in the society, I was more encouraged than ever to desire the diversity offered by a university like Rice. Finally, I am an avid Harry Potter fan. And the fact that Rice has the amazing system of Residential College reminds me of the four houses that students at Hogwarts are divided into. In addition to that, Rice University's Owl mascot only helps its resemblance to Harry Potter!
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