Undergraduate / "my knowledge of engineering" explain academic performance : Virginia Tech supplement [4]

Please read my essay for Virginia Tech explaining my academic performance and correct and grammatical errors. I also need to shorten it. The max is 250 words and this essay is 302 words.

Many people transfer from school to school of different academic levels with ease. They manage to fit in socially while maintaining scholarly ranks such as honor roll or Headmaster's list. I was one of those students; until the beginning of high school.

Filled with ascertains, I entered one of the best schools on the small island where I reside, for my freshman year. I was in for a surprise when discovering how difficult my classes were: specifically, physical science and algebra. As I sat and watched my grade point average decrease before my eyes; I knew drastic changes would be implemented. My algebra instructor volunteered to tutor me, and I happily accepted the offer. My grades increased slightly but, not to my satisfaction.

During my sophomore and junior year subtle changes were made in academic performance. My self-esteem for academics was boosted by the only teacher who displayed faith in my intelligence: my algebra teacher. Becoming cognizant of my inner being, I realized that although receiving poor grades in physical science; a lesson was learned. I am saturated with the potential energy as a 2,000 ton, iron ball at fifty yards in the sky.

This is currently my senior year. Figuratively, I am releasing that ball: filled with intelligence, creativity, sportsmanship, leadership, innovative thinking, and confidence. My academic performance and maturity has exponentially increased; from C's to B's, to presently, A's.

To sum it all up, there were unimpressive scores in my high school year but, they are rising along with my individuality, Virginia Polytechnic Institute is the institution that can become the H2O to my plant of life. Through this institution, my knowledge of engineering would be expanded; so that one day I may improve prosthetic legs, arms or even hearts for a person filled with potential energy just like me.

Undergraduate / "summer intern at the Juan F. Luis hospital" -My hero essay: Choose your own topic [4]

People are said to be influenced by many different aspects of their surroundings: their peers, family members, television, magazines, and more. However, I experienced a more spontaneous encounter with the person who would soon become my hero. My mind was opened to new things.

During the summer of 2009, I worked as a summer intern at the Juan F. Luis hospital. My duties included filing paperwork, making phone calls, answering the telephone for my department's extension, and obtaining contact information from medical examiners. Although this list seems time consuming, it was only made for me to keep busy. The young lady I intended to work for left for maternal leave, so I was stuck with her pessimistic assistant. Motivated by pursuing knowledge, I happily completed my tasks.

One morning on July 21st, I roamed the spacious halls of the half empty building. Taking a left into the elevator, an old man greeted me. Everyone usually greeted one another in the hallways, but his sounded genuine. Day after day, I observed the man. He was short. His size was fairly normal and his hair was as white as snow, but hidden underneath a cap that matched his scrubs. He was very helpful to the people that surrounded him, whether they had disabilities or no health problems at all. In my perspective, all doctors on St. Croix were extremely unpleasant unless face to face with a patient in need, but this man made me question if I was being narrow-minded.

On August 11th, my last day as an intern, I decided to tell the anonymous man that he was my hero. Doing our short but very informative conversation, I found out that he was a nurse at the hospital. I guess it did not matter what job title he had, for it was his attitude that moved me.

My hero cannot fly or donate lump sums of cash in efforts to diminish poverty. He was not a technological inventor or an activist, but he implemented such an impact in my life, that after college I will use the tools I have to impact someone else, someday, somehow, somewhere.

Please comment ans share your honest opinion. Tell me if its boring. Im not a very good writer and I am very nervous about the application process, as many are.