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Dec 5, 2010
Undergraduate / "Born and raised in Orlando, Florida" - Admissions Essay for UCF [4]

Hi, this is my admissions essay for UCF. The topic is Why do you want to attend UCF? This is just a rough draft, i know there are grammar issues. Any comments or feedback would be greatly appreciated. Thank you so much!

Born and raised in Orlando, Florida for my seventeen years, I've been to UCF so many times, I know the campus like the back of my hand. Whether I'm there for the open houses, taking a tour or just being spirited for football games; I feel like I'm already a part of the school. I want to pursue a career in the Business field and what better way to do that than attend one of the best schools in Florida that is well-known for their outstanding Business program? I'm not one-hundred percent sure of what I want to become, but I am one-hundred percent sure UCF can help me figure out what it is I want to do with the rest of my life. Driving by the campus almost all the time, I get this feeling in the pit of my stomach of excitement that i could one day have the honor and pleasure of attending this school. Its so close to home, it might possibly be my home away from home. I truly believe I am destined to go to UCF, when i was elementary school our mascot was a knight. Go figure years later, I want to continue this legacy and become a knight at the UCF. My parents unfortunatley did not get to finish college, but I can however follow in my sisters footsteps and become a knight. I am so ready University of Central Florida, I am going to do some remarkable things at your school. I will leave a changed person and your school will change as well for the better, because of my ideas.

It needs to be 250 words, this is 270 :/
spernia   
Nov 29, 2010
Undergraduate / "I open my mouth and began to sing" - meaningful event, UF Rough Draft Essay [3]

Here is the prompt: Describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community.

This is my rough draft for UF. Any comments or criticism would be helpful. Thank you! :)

"Sign up is on the back wall guys," Ms. Londeree hollered. I had so much to do that week, a lacrosse tournament and three huge tests, should I really take this on? One excuse came after another. I had enough on my plate as it was. Of course, God, the thought of Senior Year popped into my head, it was my last chance. Oh what the heck, I took that pen hanging on the clipboard with nothing more but a piece of tape and printed my name nice and neat. I felt motivated, ecstatic but nervous all at the same time to finally be singing at the Talent Show. I've been wanting to sing every year on that stage in the Performing Arts Center, but never really tried. I've watched friends' plays or bands perform, but I wanted someone to watch me for a change. Everytime I got a chance to practice I would, whether it was: walking from class to class, in the middle of lacrosse practice or volunteering at an event, I was always practicing. Before I knew it, the big day was here. You know the saying, "Time flies when you're...freaking out!" Eight was my number on a list of eighteen. Studying those lines over and over again, the words you've read probably a million times looks like a big blur now. It's all in your head, I close my eyes and say a quick prayer; don't let me down now God. My name is called, I step out onto the stage. The lights are blinding, cameras are all flashing, friends and family are there to support me. All that time I spent preparing and I've only got one thing to rely on, my heart. You've got to think with your mind, but feel with your heart. Riskiness is the blood running through my veins. The song begins, I open my mouth and began to sing. For the first time in my life, I felt like I wasn't a turtle. I stepped out of my shell and for once the room was mine, all eyes on me and I'm not going to lie, it felt so amazing! Applause at the end was the cherry on top. I didn't care if I was good or not, I just wanted to be able to overcome my fear and have my voice heard. When I enter college, my voice will be heard. Not by how much or how loud I speak, but by how powerful my actions are. I want to be counted and it only takes one person to make a difference, right? Get ready University of Florida here I come full speed, no brakes, ready to take on new challenges and don't expect me to stop.
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