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azaaza

Dec 6, 2010

Writing Feedback / what causes students to cheat on the tests? [3]

I am very grateful for your help :)
Thanks to your correction, I realize that I have many problems concerning repetition and the ways of expressing my opinions. By the way, I also thought of the alternative ways to correct my errors

1. cheat on the tests/ during exams---deceive in exams/tests???
2. The last sentence---And if students now want to continue to get top grades through cheating, they will become worthless workers in the future. Consequently, imagine that how bad our society would be???

Do you think it is better?
I look forward to receiving your reply.Thanks again for your correction.
Have a nice day!

azaaza

Dec 6, 2010

Writing Feedback / what causes students to cheat on the tests? [3]

Topic: What causes students to cheat on the tests
Nowadays, while the demand for educated labour is higher and higher, there less and less wokers who can apply this requirement. This problem may origin from the students' ability to cheat in exams. There are two main reasons for cheating.

The major reason which leads to the popularity of cheating on the tests is that learners always desire to have good grades. Most students who cheat on the tests usually have the big stress from their family about getting good marks. Similarly, if they see many classmates have high marks, they also want that fame. Therefore, these pressures unintentionally cause students to value their good marks much more than their own knowledge. Eventually, they do anything they can to achieve good marks, even cheating on the tests.

Another important reason is the lack of high self-esteem. Students with high self-esteem will feel too embarrassed to cheat on the tests. Instead, they think they have to study hard so that they will get full marks thanks to their own knowledge. In contrast, students with low self-esteem cheat on the tests whenever possible. They just think about the result they can get because of cheating and do not feel something wrong for their behaviour.

In conclusion, the wish for good marks and lack of self-respect are the contributing factors to cheating in exams. In the future, if the awareness of student about cheating are not still raised, our society which is based on the workers who know little will be hard to develop fully.

Please correct and give me your comments about the content, vocabulary, grammmar, organization and mechanics of this essay. Any suggestions will be also appreciated. Thanks for your concern!

azaaza

Dec 4, 2010

Writing Feedback / "Does a zoo have any useful purpose?" [5]

Animals are important in our life .It has many of the usages in the different fields.zoo is contains a lot of animals which receive the required care. Some people may consider that a zoo serves no useful purpose while in my view it has many benefits in our life, so I completely disagree with this statement for several reasons.

The first reason is that a zoo is essential as an educational tool. it contains hundreds of different animals which are useful in learning the students in different stages such as in primary school,university and for the children (parallel?).It is important for those students to see the animals and sometimes they need to do research about their behaviors.

for example, last year ,my brother wanted to make such a trip to see the different types of animals .and needed to concentrate on the lion.It was so difficult to go to the natural places of lion due to the hazard , so he went to the zoo which existed in Giza city in Cairo .He made the required rtip moreover he collected some datas about his behavior in a safe manner. As we see the importance of zoo as a educational tool for all the students.

Besides a zoo has an educational benefit it has an amusing and entertaining purpose. itis considered as on of the most important places for families to spend some time dur ing the holiday to reliev e their own stress and amuse with different animals. for instance, wvwry weekend i always go to the zoo with my family especially with my daughter and my wife .we spend time with animals . I play with moneky and feed it with the banana which he loves . moreover my husband love to play with the horse , she amuse riding on it .also my daughter does not forget every visit to the zoo to play with the birds.

In conclusion , I Disagree with the statement that "A zoo ha no useful purpose" not only it has an educational benefits for the students but also it is essential part for ~~the~~ people as entertainment and amusement . no one can neglect--deny? the importance of animals for us as apite in the house or as they existed in the zoo.