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bob503   
Dec 20, 2010
Undergraduate / "computer science, music and movies" - JHU-activity [5]

Prompt: A Typical student at Johns Hopkins spends less than 15 hours each week in a classroom, leaving lots of time for volunteer opportunities, clubs and organizations, athletics, social events, and other on- and off-campus activities. Aside from the academic interests you've already expressed, in what activities do you plan to engage as an undergraduate at Johns Hopkins?

JHU will enrich my university life with its diverse opportunities for student activities. I look forward to being a part of active clubs there and meeting new friends from different cultures, thus widening my view of the world.

Besides my academic interest, computer science, I am a great fan of movies and beatboxing. I have been in movie clubs since my middle school years, watching and discussing a wide range of films. I also made a short video clip for a competition with my friend, whose dream is to become a film director. To pursue my passion, I will participate in a club and engage myself more in movies.

It was 2004 when I saw an exhilarating beatboxing performance on the commercial. Deeply inspired I practiced beatboxing by watching video lessons on the Internet. My lips were chapped and Mom scolded me for noise. I eventually mastered the basic sounds of each instrument, and I still perform it for my friends. When I enter JHU, I will make a "human beatboxing" club. With my crew, I will show my talent in front of a large audience and participate in many contests. With a variety of JHU's student activities, I cannot wait to have fertile university life at JHU.

Please check my grammar and content. Thanks in advance.
bob503   
Dec 20, 2010
Undergraduate / "the impact of neurological disorders; biology" - Cornell CAS Prompt [3]

Cornell will guide me on my way to my ultimate goal of studying biology to become a Pediatric Neurosurgeon to help people like my buddy, William.

Cornell will guide me to my ultimate goal of studying biology to become a Pediatric Neurosurgeon to help people like my buddy, William.

I would cut out "on my way to" because of redundancy.
bob503   
Dec 20, 2010
Undergraduate / "I dream to be a professional programmer" - Statement - reasons for applying to HKU [5]

I applied for HKU, too.I think you are applying for Computer related major, and the personal statement should include your career and involvement in that specific field. Hong kong's system is similar to UK's, which requires your academic insight into the major. Your essay is good except for the fact that you did not mention about your professional skill in com sci. It would be a perfect essay if you add more about your major.
bob503   
Dec 20, 2010
Undergraduate / My own place, Small detail in the world, New Curriculum - NotreDame Supplement [3]

Good afternoon! There are three questions for ND's supplement, and the word counts are about 150, plus or minus.

1. The Grotto is a cherished destination on Notre Dame's campus, a space that invites students and visitors to pray and take time for reflection. Do you have a place that you seek out, and what do you contemplate there?

It is 7 o'clock in the morning, and I am in a shower room. Warm and hot water is coming out, melting my rigid body. This is a small square room whose all four sides are in my arm's reach. The room looks smaller when vapor fills up an empty space. I am thinking about what to write in the supplement essay. Yes, this is it. My dormitory's shower room is where a number of serious and casual decisions and thoughts have been made. Some may consider this weird. A serious thought in a shower room? During a ten-minute shower, I get the best meditation of the day. The total isolation from the outside world helps me to concentrate on the matter. The shower room offers me a great efficiency. In about two months, I am going to graduate, and I already started missing the room of contemplation.

2. What is one small detail in the world that you notice and wish others did, too?

If someone asks me to pick the best part of my body, I would proudly introduce the beautiful finger nails, especially the thumbs. I do not have that much knowledge in aesthetics, but I am sure the size of the thumbs are in "golden ratio." Deep and shallow wrinkles underneath the nails create a harmony for each finger. I bet I possess the most artistic fingers in the school. The finger nails do not give me utility yet, but someday I would use them for a hand model. Until I intendedly show my finger nails to people, they miss the beauty that I wish to share. I feel elated when they comment on the finger nails. Of course, it is natural to miss the tiny details, unless one has a fetish for fingers. I hope that friends notice the beauty when I just make a big motion or pose with my hands before I say something.

3. The curriculum offered at Notre Dame varies from what you might expect (e.g. Introduction to Biological Sciences, Accountancy) to topics you might not (e.g. Theology and Engineering, Friendship: From Aristotle to Facebook). If you could introduce a new course and serve as the expert instructor, what would it be and why?

I see many courses at the department of music, ranging from performance to theory. There are some courses that do not require instruments, but just harmonic voices. As expected, however, there is no course for human beatboxing, which also do not involve any other instruments at all. It was 2004 when I saw the commercial where one man showed up and performed exhilarating beatboxing. Inspired deeply I practiced this cool lip movement by watching video lessons on the Internet. My lips were chapped and mom scolded me for noise. I finally mastered the sounds of each percussion, and produced heart-striking beats. I took more pleasure in teaching my friends beatboxing than just showing them. Therefore it would be a great opportunity to be an instructor at Notre Dame. I would teach students the basic sounds, firstly. When they reach the certain level, I would create a team for a group sound to perform.

Thanks in advance.
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