Undergraduate / "Interest in business + Even Better" - University of Rochester two supplements [4]

Hi everyone. This is two supplement from university of rochester. Their application deadline is January 1st so it is great if I can have the help from you guys :) Thanks

The Rochester Curriculum - University of Rochester students enroll with no required subjects as they design their own college path. Write about the subjects and learning situations that interest you most, and how you intend to use your autonomy hereI'm very interested in the Rochester Curriculum which allows me to have the autonomy to explore my subjects' interests. I have a strong interest in two majors: law and business. My interest in business is fostered by my aunt's success in business. With her ability and courage, She has turned herself from a poor woman into a CEO of one of the best newspaper companies in Vietnam in 5 years. This anecdote is the reason why I like business. The fact that a person's decision can change the situation of the whole company. On the other hand I have always liked to experience law since it is the fundamental base for every country. The fucntion of law is to ensure that every one is treated equally and therefore, without law, the society will be a pot of unjust and bias things. Rochester's Curriculum will help me to experience my interests before deciding what major I will study.

Meliora: 'Ever better' - The University's motto, Meliora, directs our focus toward continual improvement through research, understanding, and collaborative efforts. Offer and example from your personal experience of an obstacle you faced or a problem you identified. Describe the actions you took and the result."Hey Asian, pass me the balls". That was the sentence I heard in every soccer practices when I first came to America. Being born in Vietnam, where soccer never reaches the world class level, I was stunned with the students' ability to play soccer in America. Sadly, the team looked down on me, and I felt like I was not part of the it. Depressed with my situation, but I could not give up on the sport that I loved since I was a kid. I wanted to play soccer and got respect from the team, so I decided to practice more. After every practice, I would stay in the field to do extra running and shooting around the field while my teamates competed with each other to see who could take shower first. I kept practicing with the belief that hard works will paid off one day, and that day did come. I had my first goal in America after a month in front of the impression from my teamates. Two weeks later, I even was in the starting line of my team to play against other school. I learn a lesson that, strive for your goal as much as you can, and your dedication will paid off.

Undergraduate / "What is good about being a teacher?" - Extracurricular Activity [7]

Hi Everyone, I'm an international and I did not spend too much time on writting this paragraph so I hope you guys understand and help me to fix this become better :D

I'm a senior and I will need to apply soon so it would be great if I can have some useful comments from these awsome people in here :X

"What is good about being a teacher"? I wouldn't know how to answer this until I volunteered to be a Pre Calculus grader during senior year. First, I felt disappointed when students make some silly mistakes. "How can a Pre Calculus student draws the secant function wrong", I thought. However, as the students received my solutions, they gradually showed progress. From then, I meticulously wrote the solutions so that the students can get the better understanding. Surprisingly, they kept moving me from one impression to others. I was delighted that the class grade average went up from a C minus to a B minus. My first impression grading their homework as a burden now changes to a happy and relax time after hours of working in classes. I finally realize that the happiness of the teaching job is to see the students' progress thanks to the care of a teacher.

This is my revision version, hope to get some critique from everyone :D