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Posts by rezataher
Joined: Dec 31, 2010
Last Post: Feb 6, 2011
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rezataher   
Feb 6, 2011
Graduate / Application for MSc in Economics - motivation letter [2]

studding or studying?

Your English is very good.

I am would lead?!!! What does it mean?

All in all, your SOP letter is so usual and does not contain anything special. Some of your sentences will not help you:
I am one of the most active students compared to others...while you did not mention to your GPA or possible publication.
rezataher   
Jan 13, 2011
Graduate / "To study Economics" - Motivation Letter for PhD Program Application [4]

Anyway, your SOP will be attractive for referees. As you know some SOP letters are not attractive. Your sentences made me continue reading up to end. This is very important. Because, usually referees have not enough time for reading in detail. Good luck.
rezataher   
Jan 13, 2011
Graduate / "To study Economics" - Motivation Letter for PhD Program Application [4]

Its better not to say I strongly believe that...I believe that...

As long as I remember myself, I...

As long as I remember myself I have always known that I want to study Economics and to be more specific its facets that concern International issues: this sentence is just symbolic...

As long as I remember myself I have always known that I want to study Economics and to be more specific its facets that concern International issues. That is why, when I was given an opportunity to choose the direction in which I may specialize at school, without any doubts I have chosen Economic class. I was studying only basics of Economics; however it only made my decision to continue in this direction stronger: this paragraph will not help you. Because everyone could write such sentences.

You can join some middle paragraphs...

You did not mention to your GPA...or possible publications...

It's better to write your own sentences...I already saw some of your sentences...

Altogether, It was not bad...you can try your chance...
rezataher   
Jan 4, 2011
Graduate / SOP for MS IN INDUSTRIAL ENGINEERING- The field of ergonomics [3]

You have to write I not i.

This sentence is not suitable in SOP letter: In my childhood i used to get amazed, even bewildered, by seeing different large buildings, some of them oozing out smoke from their chimney. The curiosity that i had about the factories excelled in the following years of my childhood and made me realizes my future aim to be a mechanical engineer.

You have to notice that we have many kinds of engineering in industry. Now why mechanical? Think about it.

the number one should be the best...

During this very time??? What do you mean? I think you have to improve your English. I did not continue reading your letter.
rezataher   
Dec 31, 2010
Graduate / (research in the field of composite materials) This is my SOP. [2]

SOP letter of Reza Taherzadeh Mousavian
I would like to do research in the field of composite materials. I'm interested in both ceramic-based and metallic-based composites. I wish to be in a professional research group and pursue a Ph.D. degree in the course of Materials Science and Engineering at the xxx University.

After getting my diploma from Razi high school (Boarding school for gifted students) in Shiraz, I was accepted at Shahid Chamran University of Ahwaz (one of the big universities in Iran) in Sep 2003. I did my B.Sc project in a good research group to investigate the corrosion failure of a shell and tube heat exchanger, under the supervision of A/P Dr. K. Ranjbar. Then I started my master's studies, with Materials Selection major, at Shahid Bahonar University of Kerman (one of the best Iranian universities in the field of Materials Science for its facilities and academic staffs) in Sep 2008. During this period, one of my friends at Shiraz University, which majored in Aerospace Engineering, asked me to help him in his project about simple modeling of turbulence in rockets with solid fuel. He needed to know something regarding high temperature materials. This was my first investigation about composite materials. I started to read a book (Rocket Propulsion Elements) to be familiar with high temperature ceramics (especially Borides). After this simple research, I decided to make CMC materials using mechanical alloying process for my M.Sc thesis. I talked with Professor M. H. Shariat (professor of thermodynamic in Shiraz University) to be my advisor in my thesis. He suggested me to make these materials by using combustion synthesis instead of mechanical alloying. He believes that mechanical alloying is not a highly usable technique. I started my preliminary research at International Center for Science, High Technology, & Environmental Sciences in Mahan (a small city near Kerman) to be familiar with basics of combustion synthesis. I used Al and TiO2 as starting materials to fabricate AlTi-Al2O3, Al3Ti-Al2O3, and AlTi3-Al2O3 composite materials. I found that without a pre-milling process of starting powders, no combustion synthesis occurred in both microwave and furnace. I aimed to increase the toughness and oxidation resistance of borides (TiB2 or ZrB2) by adding alumina to such materials. In-Situ technique was my purpose. Anyway, I selected A/P Dr. S. Sharafi as my first supervisor and Prof. M. H. Shariat as my second supervisor. I started my M.Sc thesis entitled" Combustion synthesis of TiB2-Al2O3 ceramic composite" in July 2009. I used Al, TiO2, and H3BO3 as starting materials. I used boric acid instead of boron oxide as boron source. During my M.Sc thesis, I was completely independent. I myself select starting materials and experimental procedures. I myself analyzed experimental results. I myself start to write all the papers. I myself be the corresponding author for all the papers. However, in some cases I used my supervisors' ideas. They trusted me. They knew that I could solve possible problems. They revised my papers for their English and some other parts like discussions. I do appreciate them. Besides my M.Sc thesis, I became interested in vortex casting and fabrication of lightweight high-strength aluminum based composites. I did use my Al2O3-TiB2 ceramic powders as reinforcement for pure and aluminum alloys. During this research, I found that incorporation of ceramic particles into aluminum melt is not an easy task. In addition, I had an offer regarding fabrication of nano-asphalt, a research project at the civil engineering department in my University. They needed a materials engineer for their purpose. We used waste glass instead of SBS and SBR polymers. By using high-energy ball-milling, we made nano-size glass powders.

I believe that having interest in research works is very important. I have two major interests: Investigations about high temperature materials like ceramic-based or carbon composites, and research about lightweight composites (foams or bulk aluminum-based, Ti-based, or Mg-based materials). I like to have enough assessments in these regards.

For this purpose, I need to find a potential supervisor with common interests, in a good research group. In such cases, there should be a team under the supervision of a master supervisor.
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