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r1m1k1   
Jan 1, 2011
Undergraduate / (no clear career goals yet) -BU What do you hope to accomplish as an Undergraduate? [2]

Hi guys! The BU application deadline is on the 3rd, and I would really appreciate my supplemental essay to be looked over by you guys. Thanks in advance everyone! And Happy New Year. :)

Given what you know about BU what do you hope to accomplish as an undergraduate here? (Up to 500 words)

I feel it would be presumptuous for me, at the age of 17, to make a statement about what my accomplishments will be over the four years down the road, as I know my goals will be modified many times over. Unlike some of my fellow applicants for a seat at BU's freshmen class next year, I do not have clear career goals as of yet, only due to the plentitude of my interests.

Moving away from my family, where I have always felt supported and cared for, into an environment where I have to be independent and self-sufficient is a challenge. As a first step, I would be very content to make a successful transition into adulthood, fitting in, and finding happiness by building a community of new friends around me. Making my undergraduate years at BU the most exciting and memorable time of my life, would probably be my biggest accomplishment. It is exhilarating for me to learn how vast the opportunities at BU are, for me to take my time and explore all of my interests, find the suitable paths - or make my own - until I figure out what it is that I want to do later in my life. For now, I want to learn and acquire as much knowledge as I possibly can, to grow and become a well-rounded, educated citizen of the world.

I want to learn from the best, who are members of BU's distinguished faculty. I want to study Classics, Philosophy and Theology, Political Science and International Relations, Psychology and Biology until I can determine my future goals. I yearn for the honor of taking a class by Elie Wiesel to delve into our shared collective memory and into issues of human morality. I would also love to immerse myself into some of the many activities that are close to my heart. Being a Chamber singer built and sustained me, during my four years in high school. One of my goals would be to continue to sing in one of the many A Cappella groups or the Choral Society at BU, as are memberships in Ballroom Dance club, and various community service and political organizations. Boston University not only would provide me all of the above opportunities, but also facilitate an extraordinary experience through a multitude of Study Abroad programs. How could I decide which dream place to go? As a Sephardic Jew, would I choose to go to Madrid, not only to study my discipline and learn about Maimonides, but to trace back the footsteps of my forefathers who were expelled from Spain during the Inquisition? Would Istanbul be the right choice, where both my parents came from, or Israel where they made their home? Probably it would be the call from Sydney, Australia that I would answer, where I spent two weeks on my own, as a sixth-grade Student Ambassador.

The thought of doing all this in a vibrant, diverse, multicultural campus, in the midst of wonderful Boston, and the anticipation of the upcoming four-year-long journey is thrilling. Whatever I can fit into my undergraduate years at BU would be my accomplishment that would enrich my life forever. Only if I am given a chance!
r1m1k1   
Dec 31, 2010
Undergraduate / "The Chinless Wonder" - MIT Challenge Essay [4]

This is perfect. I have had the opposite problem growing up. Kids used to call me triple chin.
The tone of the essay is great; it is very triumphant and anyone can connect with the idiocy of other kids in their high school class. It's a really nice essay. As someone said, maybe you could clarify how your outlook on life change when you got over this insecurity.
r1m1k1   
Dec 31, 2010
Undergraduate / Brandeis Supplement: Would you rather be raised by dinosaurs, robots, or aliens? Why? [3]

Hi guys! I'm new to this website, and I'm looking forward to reading all of your essays! I know it's last minute, but before I send it out, I would greatly appreciate some feedback on my Brandeis supplement. The question is, "If you could choose to be raised by robots, dinosaurs, or aliens, who would you pick? Why? This is longer than 250 words... but less than the character limit. Is that okay? Any tips on trimming? Thank you guys so much in advance!!!

What would it be like to be reared by non-humans? Legend says Romulus was raised by wolves, and he was the founder of Rome. Could creatures really bring human beings to such heights? How about robots, dinosaurs, or aliens? Being raised by one of these is nearly unfathomable to one without imagination. However, if I had to pick, aliens would appear to be the best choice. Seeing as how robots have no true feelings (their circuitry can only allow for emulation) and dinosaurs existed in a time where life was only about survival and humans were non-existent, aliens seem to be the only life forms capable of human-like advancement, and maybe beyond. I would not want to be raised by an overly violent and brutish race, such as Klingons for instance. But if the human-created genre of science fiction serves as any base, there is a possibility of being raised in a world far more advanced than our own. Hovercraft, flawless political systems, and intergalactic transportation are but a few things my mind can conjure up that would be thoroughly amazing to behold. However, alien life could possibly be vastly different than in the workings of human imagination. Space is fathomless and a complete unknown. I would take my chances though. I personally do not find scrounging for meat with dinosaurs or lacking true humanoid personality appealing. With aliens, the possibilities are endless. One could satisfy far-reaching curiosity with prospects of galactic discovery, of a universal peace, and an invention for everything your mind can, or may not be able to, conjure, such as in Caladan, a planet in Frank Herbert's Dune. My choice, therefore, would be an upbringing by aliens, who might offer me knowledge of and a window to the future, as well as the opportunity to find the answers to many questions that humans have desperately sought through religions, philosophies, and science since the beginning of time.
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