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sidsaboo   
Jan 1, 2011
Essays / Help with psychology essay: the information and sensitivity criteria [5]

hey
its sounds interesting to me... but im still not quite sure if its related to both political science and psychology.
try changing it to mayb... the causes and effects of the surroundings which leads to these citizens to turn against the governing body... !!
Anys care to help me ..
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sidsaboo   
Jan 1, 2011
Undergraduate / "Modern Physics, sports, location" - Supplement , WHY Stanford. [7]

Hey have a look at his... kinda revised ure essay!

A mixed feeling of tension and excitement is rushing through me, and i am perplexed on what should i do for the upcming physics test. Trying to go through notes online, l come across Leonard Susskind's Modern Physics course on YouTube. Starting to watch the first course, there is a sudden change in the atmosphere and all of a sudden from a tense, excited young kid, i feel relaxed and confident, enjoying the lectures.

A few years ahead, i see myself a part of these classes, enjoying and learning with the same enthusiasm when i first saw it. Having a small class is the perfect opportunity to express myself and to be a part of the class for in larger , diverse classes, their is bit of passiveness amongst the students ( needs a lil correction) . And Stanford offering its students this privilege of leaning is what sets it apart from many other universities. The campus life Stanford offers is also another factor needs to be taken into account with great offerings in sports which i see myself being an integral part of.

Another thing that I find appealing is the access to the six graduate schools. being greatly interested in finance; In future i would be getting the chance to be where the Modern Portfolio Theory was created, and also to share the Falconer Library that has held the great Nobel Prizes of the Stanford Scholar community.

Though its vast campus, Stanford has a great mix of city life, being located next to San Francisco will give me as a student a bit of both worlds. And I see myself in recent future walking into the classroom I once watched on internet, and being an active member of the class.

I think this sounds way better... and atleast will not be torn to pieces by the stanford offcials...!
CIao
sidsaboo   
Jan 1, 2011
Undergraduate / (My aunt took me to the hospital) - What attracts me to the study of engineering? [3]

Hey,
Its a great essay.. and i love the last 2 lines. but yeah in certain it could do with a bit polishing... you could try starting it being a lil dramatic , maybe this would catch the attention of the reader.

Something like... Mutated limbs, Cut arms and dead kids, maybe my age and some even younger. These are the images which come flashing to me when i think about the trips i used to take with my aunt... then carry on.

Anyways thanks for your help in my thread.
Best of luck
sidsaboo   
Jan 1, 2011
Undergraduate / "if you had 10000$" - UVirginia Essay... engineering supplement [8]

hey krum93,
yeah the affordability of the whole project got quite a few people i was showing this essay to , to question it... but in my opinion 10,000 dollars is lot of money... and getting the basic raw materials.. like the steel parts from a junkyard.. or so wouldn't cost that much... also having a team to buy sensors and GPA to work on the software to navigate the doesn't cost much above a few thousand dollars. And finally the compressor is a simple feature which just needs to be taken into account while designing.

So to answer your question, one would experience a cost of more than 10000 dollars, but if carefully taking into account what exactly you will be doing... you can build it within the budget.

and thats what i guess a good engineer does, thinks a few steps ahead.
CHEERS!
sidsaboo   
Jan 1, 2011
Undergraduate / "Modern Physics, sports, location" - Supplement , WHY Stanford. [7]

MAn , you have some serious grammatical mistakes... And stanford wont like it a single bit!!
Just taking your advice and being brutal... but you gotta seriously work on your writing... the ideas are great... but the way you presented it isnt the best!

Aso your tense and verbs are sounding funny to me atleast!
BEst of luck,
Sid
sidsaboo   
Jan 1, 2011
Undergraduate / "wanted to be an inventor" - Common App - My Childhood [3]

Hey,
ok now in the first paragraph--- you have used fascinated me ... a lotta times...try to replace it by enthralled or something or just. cut it down to.. the innovations that characters like dexter etc... fascinated me to mimic (or do something like) them in the future, and from there on began my love for robots... etc which they built

in the 2nd stanza replace... and usually went to the library or used the internet to read about that idea and learn more about it.

Also one thing i would like to incluse would be Feynman;s experience in university studying science... Its mentioned in the book!!( ive read it and love it also and am pretty sure the reader who'll be judging your essay will have read it also) so mention about how attending university made him have a over all experience. step out of his comfort zone... etc!!

umm... since we both are applying for engineering...and you were kind enough to help me... if you would like i can send you my common app essay... im not too comfortable with it being put on this site... email me at siddhantsaboo@gmail.com

Anyways the ideas portrayed are great!!
Best of Luck!
sidsaboo   
Jan 1, 2011
Undergraduate / Archery, Swimming, Reading, building - Stuff you do for the pleasure of it - MIT [12]

Hey...
for the first essay , i would go with the first 1... its beautfully written and even with the limited word count, expresses to the reader how passionate you are about archery and how it makes you feel.

For the second one.... i would go with the first 1... i myself am applying to ECE program in different universities... and find whatever you have spoken about the MIT's programs... makes you stand out as an applicant who knows what one wants to do and knows exactly why MIT is the place for her..

They love to see that confidence.!! :-)
Best of Luck!
sidsaboo   
Jan 1, 2011
Undergraduate / "if you had 10000$" - UVirginia Essay... engineering supplement [8]

hey guys, the essay title for the engineering supplement essay is

Engineering: If you were given a $10,000 budget and the opportunity to build a small team of talented motivated individuals, what would you propose to accomplish?

Walking everyday from my house to school and back has never been the most sought after time in the day for me. This is mainly because while walking along the streets of Mumbai city, in every block one will come across a slum area, which is greatly polluted and has garbage thrown about in an unhygienic manner, which eventually makes its way through the rest of the block.

Given a budget of 10,000 $, I would make most of my knowledge as a budding engineer to build small garbage disposable robots, which could navigate through all the streets and alleys in my block and a few surrounding blocks, collecting the garbage by storing it in their body. When enough garbage would have been collected, I would further allow these small robots to be able to compress the garbage into a rectangular shape, making it easier for the garbage to be easily transportable.

Knowledge on engineering has always encouraged me to innovate technology at a lower cost providing better and more efficient functions. Robots like this made from used automobile and machine parts can be fairly cost efficient and help in beautifying the whole block and improving the quality of life of many of the slum dwellers.

hey in my opinion i do feel there are a few places where some of the words aren't fitting, but i have no idea how to substitute them!!

Anyways would love some advice and criticism on if what i've written is fine!
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