waqar
Jan 9, 2011
Undergraduate / fascinated by computers, to use my creative and imaginative thinking [7]
thank you ANUAR ALSHANBAYEV
and
thankyou Brian Deely
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thank you ANUAR ALSHANBAYEV
and
thankyou Brian Deely
..
waqar
Jan 9, 2011
Writing Feedback / ielts: cultural heritage used to attract tourists and promote tourism [6]
i think it was good..
but try and explain your points a bit more and also you skipped to different points too much between the paragraphs...
i think ending was very good ...
good luck
waqar
i think it was good..
but try and explain your points a bit more and also you skipped to different points too much between the paragraphs...
i think ending was very good ...
good luck
waqar
waqar
Jan 8, 2011
Undergraduate / "How to be rich: Working hard or Luck?" - (common app essay) [5]
i think it was good generally.. but i think you jumped to different points very quickly..
good luck
waqar
i think it was good generally.. but i think you jumped to different points very quickly..
good luck
waqar
waqar
Jan 8, 2011
Undergraduate / fascinated by computers, to use my creative and imaginative thinking [7]
i have written this for my application.. as english is my second language i think there are still many mistakes here.. i would greatly appreciate it if you would proof read it.. thanks.. i also have cut down on words as much as possible...
Throughout my 13 years of education I have always been fascinated by computers. I have enjoyed studying A-levels computing, and it was through this coursework that I was able to learn Visual Basic, which is now a very important part of my life. I enjoy a very good teacher-student relationship with my computer teacher and he was the one who pushed me to pursue in this field. Apart from computing I also like math and I have always relished the opportunity to apply it in real life problems.
My interest in computing and math has not been limited with the classroom exercises, but I also was an active member of the computer society at school. Moreover, I participated in the Bahria College Project Competition, where I designed a program entirely on Q-Basic and won the third place in the competition through my diligence and pure determination. I like to spend my spare time watching the Discovery channel and reading cyber magazines which help me to learn about different technological and scientific advancements.
During my summer holidays I joined Askari Bank and did an internship in its online banking branch. Here I learned the actual processes that go behind all the transactions. I also learned and implemented my knowledge in practice.
Apart from academics I have always liked to take responsibilities, as I was the President of my school's Social Work Society in the year 2009-2010. I am also a sports enthusiast; I enjoy playing football and cricket. I believe that sports play a very pivotal part in shaping one's character. It not only teaches self-discipline, team work and determination, but also polishes the leadership qualities of a person. I am a member of my college football team and also captain the local football team. In the recent floods in Pakistan I tested my managerial ability (as I enjoy taking up challenges), and organized a football tournament through which I was able to gather about Rs 20,000 for the flood victims.
The purpose of computers is to assist humans and ease their work. This is the reason why the use of computers is increasing so much everyday. I wish to use my creative and imaginative thinking to develop such technologies so that they will benefit the people and the planet.
i have written this for my application.. as english is my second language i think there are still many mistakes here.. i would greatly appreciate it if you would proof read it.. thanks.. i also have cut down on words as much as possible...
Throughout my 13 years of education I have always been fascinated by computers. I have enjoyed studying A-levels computing, and it was through this coursework that I was able to learn Visual Basic, which is now a very important part of my life. I enjoy a very good teacher-student relationship with my computer teacher and he was the one who pushed me to pursue in this field. Apart from computing I also like math and I have always relished the opportunity to apply it in real life problems.
My interest in computing and math has not been limited with the classroom exercises, but I also was an active member of the computer society at school. Moreover, I participated in the Bahria College Project Competition, where I designed a program entirely on Q-Basic and won the third place in the competition through my diligence and pure determination. I like to spend my spare time watching the Discovery channel and reading cyber magazines which help me to learn about different technological and scientific advancements.
During my summer holidays I joined Askari Bank and did an internship in its online banking branch. Here I learned the actual processes that go behind all the transactions. I also learned and implemented my knowledge in practice.
Apart from academics I have always liked to take responsibilities, as I was the President of my school's Social Work Society in the year 2009-2010. I am also a sports enthusiast; I enjoy playing football and cricket. I believe that sports play a very pivotal part in shaping one's character. It not only teaches self-discipline, team work and determination, but also polishes the leadership qualities of a person. I am a member of my college football team and also captain the local football team. In the recent floods in Pakistan I tested my managerial ability (as I enjoy taking up challenges), and organized a football tournament through which I was able to gather about Rs 20,000 for the flood victims.
The purpose of computers is to assist humans and ease their work. This is the reason why the use of computers is increasing so much everyday. I wish to use my creative and imaginative thinking to develop such technologies so that they will benefit the people and the planet.
