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wendywhy   
Jan 13, 2011
Essays / About the importance of joy - dont know how to write my bard essay [6]

Yeah it's hard to handle so I just decided not to apply =p

I think you can talk about something that brings joy in the end, and truly makes one happy. For example, you can write about an experience when the nature of happiness suddenly came to you through that experience. Maybe the sort of happiness different from other occasions when you feel pleasant, excited, or content?

Hope this makes some sense...
wendywhy   
Jan 13, 2011
Writing Feedback / "Haruki Murakami: Share with us a few of your favorite books" short answer [3]

The whole question is: Share with us a few of your favorite books, poems, authors, films, plays, pieces of music, musicians, performers, paintings, artists, blogs, magazines, or newspapers? Feel free to touch on one, some, or all of the categories listed, or add a category of your own.

Thanks for reading! Every comment is appreciated!

Haruki Murakami is a most frequent name on my book-list. Typically representative of Japanese modern literature, he terrifically depicts isolation, maturity, death and deep humanities in his novels such as Norwegian Wood, All God's Children Can Dance, and Hear The Wind Sing. The subtle sentiments gently echo in my heart, yet leave more unsaid to let me taste and penetrate. My sympathy with the characters, common or absurd, often reveals unperceived nature or change of mine.

Solitude has been a complex companion that occupies most of my time. I have struggled bitterly against it at sleepless nights, covered by darkness and overwhelmed by thoughts. I can't stand it when my friends walked away from me and when my passionate invitations only received cold rejections. It's not the trifles that scared me, but the threatening idea, "now I am alone". I tried to share such annoying feelings with friends as to look for comfort, but I wasn't understood until I talked to Haruki Murakami, by reading through his words.

In his Norwegian Wood, the young man, lost inside, looks as normal as anyone else. Hanging out, having friends, studying hard, he still can't fill the emptiness in his heart. His deeper self-consciousness and realization of loneliness come gradually and silently. The way he discovers himself and questions the world definitely allows me to identify with and answer my similar puzzles. Haruki also said: " In certain areas of my life, I actively seek out solitude." I then understood that solitude is the shadow of faith, guiding and helping me to reveal something in the dark - myself. It is inevitably there, a companion I choose to embrace.
wendywhy   
Jan 13, 2011
Undergraduate / "seminar about HIV/AIDS prevention" - extracurricular activities or work experiences [7]

I worked with the people who were infected with AIDS; I was able to see the world through their eyes, and as a result, it helped me to truly appreciate the fact that they aren't a threat to those they are in contact with. I have realized the fact that, helping the community or individuals in need, especially when they have no hope and expectation from this life, makes you better person.

I would suggest use "the fact that" for only one time. Think of another phrase.

Impressive experience and nice statement of its influence on you:)
wendywhy   
Jan 12, 2011
Undergraduate / "intelligent and driven father" - Common App essay for Ivies [5]

I am an international student so I can't get you very good comment about the language and stuff. But it is not a bad essay at all and there is no need to worry, as you said. I do get a convincing picture about your family and how it's shaped you. And I like you conclusions about ambition in the end. However, the only concern I have is whether it could stand out in similar stories... and somehow it seems to fall into the "show, not tell" trap.

By the way, thanks for your nice comment on mine!! Best of luck!!
wendywhy   
Jan 11, 2011
Undergraduate / "what do you want to dissolve and what solvent would you use?" - U Chicago [4]

pretty urgent... please help me out and every comment is appreciated!!! :)

Essay Option 3. Salt, governments, beliefs, and celebrity couples are a few examples of things that can be dissolved. You've just been granted the power to dissolve anything: physical, metaphorical, abstract, concrete...you name it. What do you dissolve, and what solvent do you use?

The cars, tightly stuck to the tilted ground, silently queue up in a line, as if they wouldn't move when the horizon turns over and sky becomes bottom. All buildings, regardless of height, stack together as a fearful crowd and grow up to the same direction. People creep along the surface of earth, busily coming and going, never able to leave that vast plane unless by plane. Every object in my eyes, both moving and still, is perfectly controlled by a mysterious power and functions under in orderly arrangement: gravity.

The idea of gravity extends out from the apple that Newton saw fall to his feet. He witnessed the apple being pulled towards the earth, just as we are pulled toward life's snares and trappings. The young study under the pressure of outside expectations, the old live with the worries of daily trifles. Under the restraint of our unbreakable destiny, we become fixed actors, skilled performers in bridging life's challenges. Some of us come to master the art of success, while others remain confused participants and get lost in the shuffle.

Their existences seem as reasonable and natural as gravity, and part of the necessities we live upon. However, this seemingly harmonious scene looks so ill, that I want to dissolve the gravity.

What if the world goes crazy and out of control? Apples "fall" toward the sky, water flows everywhere in drops, and televisions hit the wall and the roof. We can jump as high as want or dive to the bottom of oceans without pressure, for there is no law of gravity anymore.

Similarly, what if nothing pulls our mind anymore? No obstacles get in the way of our open space, no voices of authority interfere with those of our own, and no outside expectations follow as obligatory responsibilities. We are the only compass that leads to wherever the heart points, in our original sense of direction, for there is no force stronger than our will.

What if there is no such thing as bondage? Prices of housing, gasoline, or meat prison no slaves, established values of society set no rules for individuals, and educational regulations determine no limits of imagination. We overthrow the routine life, stop chasing after the numbers, and break the rhythm of stereotyped monotony, for there is no need to stay inside the lines.

What if fear doesn't silence and appease us? Gains and losses are not meticulously calculated for the sake of survival, while risks and dreams are taken to live a regretless and splendid life. We company with audacity to try things of novelty and make discords in the mainstream.

Without a physical solvent powerful enough, the earth may still turn around as usual. Stars rotating, universe enduring, our minimum entities may fade away in the enormous and immortal without trace.

But we can still break the gravity that constrains our mind and actions. All we need is bold courage, the courage of Columbus when he sailed across Atlantic Ocean under guidance of a star, that of John Lennon when he believed music would change the world, that of Forrest Gump when he tirelessly runs for life regardless despise from the world. Faith could be negligible when we think it is, but strong enough to dissolve gravity when we believe it.

Now, let's jump out of the earth surface, like a winged insect that waves his alas (right word? Or wings?) fiercely to the sky.
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