fdmonta
Feb 23, 2011
Undergraduate / "what else it has in store for me" - Autobiography essay [5]
Please would some body check my paper?
Please would some body check my paper?
fdmonta
Feb 21, 2011
Undergraduate / "what else it has in store for me" - Autobiography essay [5]
Thank you I will check again my spelling and cut some children story.
Thank you I will check again my spelling and cut some children story.
fdmonta
Feb 21, 2011
Undergraduate / "what else it has in store for me" - Autobiography essay [5]
Autobiography
In a very pleasant summer in the windy city of Chicago Illinois, I was born in the month of July 1963. It was a memorable year for so many people because it was the day that the president of the United States of America, John F. Kennedy, was killed. At the same time blues, rock & rock came alive. My parents met each other after coming to America as farm workers. Shortly after they were married, my parents had five children. I am the first born of three other brothers and one sister. This is just the beginning of the story that is my life, a life filled with rich experiences, family, and God.
When I was about seven years old, I moved back to Puerto Rico to live with my grandparents. My grandparents gave me a home with a solid Christian environment. The influence of my cousins and families from the "States" helped reinforce my outside influence of the English language. The roots were there, but as the days went by and the time dictated our destiny, I was married and had two wonderful children, one girl and one boy.
I remember the day that my wife told me she was pregnant, I felt nervous and confused because I did not know how to be a father or how to take care of a baby. I remember that I started crying and was scared, but at the same time I hugged my wife and started to kiss her and told her how much I love her. It was the most beautiful experience watching her belly grow; touching and feeling a human being inside the person I most loved. It was incredible! It was a wonderful experience to see the birth of my little defenseless baby girl, red and crying. I held her trying to understand the power of what happened on this special day. If anyone ever has doubted in God, the birth of my baby girl was the perfect example of the love that God has for us. Holding in my arms this little angel and looking at her was the most beautiful experience in my life, holding her as if someone would take her away from me or harm my baby, I did not take my eyes away from her. I started to thank God for this gift.
A year later, God rewarded me with a baby boy, the most beautiful creation that God created. This time, I felt like I won the lottery because he was just like me. At the moment that I set eyes at this boy, I was very proud of him. His arm and body shape was big, and even though he was just a newborn, his chest and arms were firm and strong. I never thought that I could fall in love with another baby as much as I loved my baby girl. Time has escaped through my hands so quickly that I did not have time to catch up with all the blessings that I have received from God.
If I had a chance to rewrite my history, I would do exactly the same thing. A perfect wife, perfect daughter, and a perfect son. Observing my kids grow up has been very rewarding because they are excellent kids. Throughout their life my wife and I touched them with the same moral principles which we were brought up. These days my two little angels are in college finishing their last year becoming professionals with excellent grades. As a result of all this love that we brought our children, my family has grown up. My daughter has a wonderful husband with two beautiful grandchildren. My son has also made me proud. He taught me many good things: his dedication for college his determination to be the best in college and the love that he have for his gorgeous Philippine girlfriend, never ends. The story of my life has taught me so much but it is far from over. I cannot wait to see what else it has in store for me.
Autobiography
In a very pleasant summer in the windy city of Chicago Illinois, I was born in the month of July 1963. It was a memorable year for so many people because it was the day that the president of the United States of America, John F. Kennedy, was killed. At the same time blues, rock & rock came alive. My parents met each other after coming to America as farm workers. Shortly after they were married, my parents had five children. I am the first born of three other brothers and one sister. This is just the beginning of the story that is my life, a life filled with rich experiences, family, and God.
When I was about seven years old, I moved back to Puerto Rico to live with my grandparents. My grandparents gave me a home with a solid Christian environment. The influence of my cousins and families from the "States" helped reinforce my outside influence of the English language. The roots were there, but as the days went by and the time dictated our destiny, I was married and had two wonderful children, one girl and one boy.
I remember the day that my wife told me she was pregnant, I felt nervous and confused because I did not know how to be a father or how to take care of a baby. I remember that I started crying and was scared, but at the same time I hugged my wife and started to kiss her and told her how much I love her. It was the most beautiful experience watching her belly grow; touching and feeling a human being inside the person I most loved. It was incredible! It was a wonderful experience to see the birth of my little defenseless baby girl, red and crying. I held her trying to understand the power of what happened on this special day. If anyone ever has doubted in God, the birth of my baby girl was the perfect example of the love that God has for us. Holding in my arms this little angel and looking at her was the most beautiful experience in my life, holding her as if someone would take her away from me or harm my baby, I did not take my eyes away from her. I started to thank God for this gift.
A year later, God rewarded me with a baby boy, the most beautiful creation that God created. This time, I felt like I won the lottery because he was just like me. At the moment that I set eyes at this boy, I was very proud of him. His arm and body shape was big, and even though he was just a newborn, his chest and arms were firm and strong. I never thought that I could fall in love with another baby as much as I loved my baby girl. Time has escaped through my hands so quickly that I did not have time to catch up with all the blessings that I have received from God.
If I had a chance to rewrite my history, I would do exactly the same thing. A perfect wife, perfect daughter, and a perfect son. Observing my kids grow up has been very rewarding because they are excellent kids. Throughout their life my wife and I touched them with the same moral principles which we were brought up. These days my two little angels are in college finishing their last year becoming professionals with excellent grades. As a result of all this love that we brought our children, my family has grown up. My daughter has a wonderful husband with two beautiful grandchildren. My son has also made me proud. He taught me many good things: his dedication for college his determination to be the best in college and the love that he have for his gorgeous Philippine girlfriend, never ends. The story of my life has taught me so much but it is far from over. I cannot wait to see what else it has in store for me.
fdmonta
Jan 26, 2011
Writing Feedback / "Punta Cana" - My Favorite Vacation [5]
I need help to improve my essay and vocabulary I just go to Valencia and I need to pass the state essay in order to move on. I am doing my best, but I also will need help and advices on how to improve.
Thank you
I need help to improve my essay and vocabulary I just go to Valencia and I need to pass the state essay in order to move on. I am doing my best, but I also will need help and advices on how to improve.
Thank you
fdmonta
Jan 26, 2011
Writing Feedback / "Punta Cana" - My Favorite Vacation [5]
My Favorite Vacation
When I go to Punta Cana for vacation, I really enjoy myself and have lots of fun, because is like been in a paradise for a whole week.
My favorite vacation is in the Dominican Republic because have four basic thing that makes my experience unique, first, the hotel has a luxury lobby and very well decorated that makes the quest especial, another reason is the room with a large balcony and beach front view, then when I walk out of the room I will enjoy a huge swimming pool with bar and water sport shows that makes my stay placer.
Second, the prices of the hotel are very affordable for a middle class worker. Thank to that I can make my vacation possible. Another economical factor is that the cost of living in the Island is cheaper than the U.S.A, for example one dollar $1.00 is equal to 30.00 pesos R.D. Therefore give me for opportunity to save money on souvenirs.
Third, reason why Dominican Republican is my favorite places for vacation is because of the tropical weather, no matter what time of the day, you always will find a perfect atmosphere and give you the chance to wear light cloud or wear you swimming set all day. The clime is a very pleasure invitation to be in the beach most of the time drinking a delicious "Pińa Colada". Another reason is the water sports or sailing that I can have.
Finally, the hotel offered all inclusive in beverage and food, all you can eat and as many times you want to eat and drink, taking another economical worry away from my vacation. The restaurants and different kitchen team makes this hotel unique and a wonderful experience.
In conclusion, having a good time in my vacation at Dominican Republic and enjoying the hotel accommodation, the beach, weather and the food is what makes me happy and ready for the next year.
My Favorite Vacation
When I go to Punta Cana for vacation, I really enjoy myself and have lots of fun, because is like been in a paradise for a whole week.
My favorite vacation is in the Dominican Republic because have four basic thing that makes my experience unique, first, the hotel has a luxury lobby and very well decorated that makes the quest especial, another reason is the room with a large balcony and beach front view, then when I walk out of the room I will enjoy a huge swimming pool with bar and water sport shows that makes my stay placer.
Second, the prices of the hotel are very affordable for a middle class worker. Thank to that I can make my vacation possible. Another economical factor is that the cost of living in the Island is cheaper than the U.S.A, for example one dollar $1.00 is equal to 30.00 pesos R.D. Therefore give me for opportunity to save money on souvenirs.
Third, reason why Dominican Republican is my favorite places for vacation is because of the tropical weather, no matter what time of the day, you always will find a perfect atmosphere and give you the chance to wear light cloud or wear you swimming set all day. The clime is a very pleasure invitation to be in the beach most of the time drinking a delicious "Pińa Colada". Another reason is the water sports or sailing that I can have.
Finally, the hotel offered all inclusive in beverage and food, all you can eat and as many times you want to eat and drink, taking another economical worry away from my vacation. The restaurants and different kitchen team makes this hotel unique and a wonderful experience.
In conclusion, having a good time in my vacation at Dominican Republic and enjoying the hotel accommodation, the beach, weather and the food is what makes me happy and ready for the next year.
