Graduate / "To positively affect the lives" - Speech Language Pathology personal [3]

i am not sure about the word client. Are u reffering to that autism boy. i would change it to child/ patient.

Rest of it is very good.

Wish you success

Essays / Length of personal statement [8]

I think best approach would be to tell your story no matter how long it is. ...once you have it written. then you can eliminate minor details

Undergraduate / "higher education and my dad" - a person who has had a significant influence on you [4]

I agree with above commentor. You need to tell them how you feel about this situation rather than just telling a story. How this story is affecting your family and you. you can eliminate small details in story and focus on main parts

Undergraduate / "size, location, reputation, and the weather and the inside" Emory a college for you? [4]

i think you should be more specific about type of health care major you want to do.

Also rather than saying trying different food....try to say some other cool stuff you can learn there. such as challenges many developing nations are facing.