Chinh
Feb 28, 2011
Writing Feedback / whether to allocate a huge of money for defense is right policy [4]
Thanks Susan! I always appreciate your comments.
Some people believe this policy brings a lot of benefits outweighed its drawbacks while others claim that the opposite is true. --> the full sentence I want to express is "some people believe this policy brings a lot of benefits which outweigh its drawbacks while others claim that opposite is true". However I have one grammar mistake with the word "outweighed".
However, in my view, there would be a lot of disadvantages overshadowed advantages above if the policy were to come true. -> I intend to express that if this police were to realize, its disadvantages are greater than its advantages. Nevertheless, I use wrong words. Could you tell me in this sentence I should use what word?
In conclusion = To conclude?
Thanks Susan! I always appreciate your comments.
Some people believe this policy brings a lot of benefits outweighed its drawbacks while others claim that the opposite is true. --> the full sentence I want to express is "some people believe this policy brings a lot of benefits which outweigh its drawbacks while others claim that opposite is true". However I have one grammar mistake with the word "outweighed".
However, in my view, there would be a lot of disadvantages overshadowed advantages above if the policy were to come true. -> I intend to express that if this police were to realize, its disadvantages are greater than its advantages. Nevertheless, I use wrong words. Could you tell me in this sentence I should use what word?
In conclusion = To conclude?