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"between America and Saudi Arabia" - family history, culture or environment [4]
My Family history and culture has a huge influence
on me. It has made me who I am today. I have two very different backgrounds, which includes lifestyle, food, culture, religious beliefs and so much more. My dad is from Saudi Arabia and my mom is from America,
I like to consider myself half and half. I
think you should change this sentence.Traveling back and forth between America and Saudi Arabia made me appreciate the way of life and helped me understand more about people
and, their differences and similarities. I am able to communicate, connect and socialize because I understand each of their culture.
Seeing two different cultures has helped me
become the person that I am.This is a little similar to the second sentence. It could be like:
Being accustomed to two different cultures has made me understand the importance of diversity.I have always been exposed to those who are different
thanfrom me.
and I have found that IIt has helped me to respect people no matter where they are from. I enjoy meeting new people from different countries around the world.
I speak two languages English and Arabic, both fluently, but English is my mother tongue. Even though I went to an all Arabic school through grade 1 to grade 7,
I was the only one out of my 5 siblings raised to speak mostly English.This sentence doesn't sound very good.It could be like:
Even though I went to an all Arabic school from grade 1 to grade 7, I spoke in English the most.Therefore, in grade 8 my parents
decided to have me live inthought of sending me to America with my mom in Hudson, Wisconsin.
but For my high school
years I've decided to come back to Saudi Arabia and enroll in a school that follows the American system.
My family environment made me
into a more passionate and successful student.
Their support has made me confident enough to go through the hardships of this worldly journey. Through this confidence and strength I am going to pursue my education and
to perform well in all my classes no matter the difficulty.
Taking pride in my work is the most important influence resulting from my family atmosphere. The overall relief and joy that I will experience when I graduate will not be matched anywhere else.The ending can be changed into a much better one. Try to change the structure of the sentence. It could be like: "the family atmosphere helped me to take pride in my work."Try to form another sentence, dont use this one :
The overall relief and joy that I will experience when I graduate will not be matched anywhere else.It was really nice reading your experience. I helped you as much as I could by editing a few sentences. Hope you do well! Good Luck! 