Writing Feedback / What is your favorite food to eat? how do you prepare it? [4]

the "as if hamburger that calls junk food" part could be deleted.
Use only one of the two: "First of all", "nowadays"
"how food delicious is" should be "how delicious the food it"
I guess I will make you want to try my favorite food. Well, I suggest you how to make egg-roll: this sentence is too informal

Essays / Why do people commit crimes? (Speculating a cause essay) Help with intro and MIs. [5]

post some myths. For example, one of the lay theory would expect that most sex murderers are mentally ill but the reality is that they don't differ much from other murderers. I saw this in a book called Sexual Murderers but you can certainly found relevant researches that correct many public myths about crimes and criminals.